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12/3/24, 2:41 PM
Spectacular!!

Pcm
12/3/24, 3:28 PM
@[Dan25](/user/show/10053172) Thanks
12/3/24, 1:58 PM
Definitely a hot and fun read! I felt Tim's corruption was a bit quick for just being overwhelmed with lust, but I get from a story pacing perspective why you'd have it that way. If you continue with more chapters, it'd be interesting to see Tim wrestle with his morality whenever he's away from Weston long enough. Either way, hope you continue!
12/1/24, 8:24 PM
PLEASE continue this story or write more in this world! Questions: What does happen when the key is removed? Can others be infected? What does happen when wrecked/disassembled/ other parts replaced? Does replaced parts affect the human condition or form?

12/3/24, 2:34 AM
@[Jakkin Larethian](/user/show/10035525) I have a next chapter in my head. I just need to sit down and do it. Keys removed: Were-car is stuck unconscious, (unable to start themselves) until the keys are returned. Can others be infected: Not that we know of, it seems to be genetic. Wrecked: likely not survive (sorry to be grim). It would take a monumental effort to restore a wrecked or partially wrecked were-car to a condition where they can start themselves again, and even moreso to transform back into human form. Replaced parts: the same magic that transfers their biological organs and body into car parts also works in reverse. Usefully, this means replacing parts in a were-car can actually mend or improve the were-car’s biological health. It’s not unusual for were-cars — who trust their mechanics — to avoid expensive medical bills by getting treated as cars instead of people, then remaining as cars for a few days/weeks/months until their fit enough to TF back. The next chapter I would write goes into some detail about this. Thank you for the comment.

12/3/24, 11:21 AM
@[The Dirty Spiders](/user/show/571676) I'm a great fan of inanimate TFs, too. A suggestion for a little tweak to the replacement lore..... Replacement parts start out as 'inert' and have to be assimilated, during which time the were-car is unable to resume their human form. Oil changes are quick, since the oil is stirred, circulated and spread thinly on 'live' surfaces, so Moses was able to change back after being driven home. Replacement parts would need more time, perhaps a whole weekend for a wiper blade. So... Eric's tyres have worn down until they are only just street-legal. He has to plan a week's vacation to get them changed, and has a new battery at the same time.

12/3/24, 12:28 PM
@[kb57z](/user/show/1950995) To be honest, you’ve almost perfectly hit the nail on the head. I was being vague because if I do write a part II, it will go into this, but yes. Smaller jobs get assimilated faster. Bigger replacement jobs are akin to a person recovering from surgery; They can only transform once they’re well enough and the replaced parts have been assimilated. Although tires are not a big deal (not a week anyways, maybe 25 minute or an hour); were cars will regrow their tire threading naturally while in human form, and should they be in car form long enough to need a tire change, it’s no more upsetting than a perhaps “slightly uncomfortable” nail clipping, or aggressive foot exfoliation.
12/3/24, 10:35 AM
we are in for a great start
12/3/24, 9:42 AM
Loving this series, think it time that Jake was forced to join, he will feel better for it. "Resistance is Futile"
12/2/24, 7:27 AM
Again, regarding the Google translator issues, Sir, I slowed my reading and watched more carefully for translation issues. There are in fact numerous cases where the translation wording is definitely awkward in a way that might bother a few readers, but again, personally i did not find any of them serious enough to affect my understanding. Are you really concerned about revising your original? Or perhaps you also have an interest in improving your own English, Sir? If it pleases you, Sir, i am happy to provide more specific feedback.

12/2/24, 8:59 AM
@[boi98229](/user/show/10027285) Thanks for the feedback, my friend. But sorry, I don't have the energy to improve my English in recent times. Maybe I'll find time to learn English and revise the stories in the future. Of course, use the logic, cultural context, and rhetoric of the English language. But for me lately, completion is more important than perfection. Perhaps, you or someone else can revise the story from the perspective of a native English speaker. The names of people, places, and adjectives can be more in line with your habits. It's equivalent that I'm just providing ideas for the development of the story, but English speakers will definitely have a better reading experience.

12/3/24, 6:52 AM
@[MC Master](/user/show/10003908) Really, I don't have a problem myself. The issues aren't significant enough to hinder understanding. If you are happy, I am happy. No one else has commented, so let's assume the best. I would rather spend time reading, and will look forward to read whatever you decide to write. Have fun with it!
11/28/24, 11:53 AM
Definitely looking forward to more. Glad to see you publishing again (or maybe I've just been away for a bit haha)

12/3/24, 5:11 AM
@[Master Sarouk](/user/show/2319535) Thank you for commenting. I've been putting stuff up, but this piece, like I said in the author's note, I held on to this for a while. Then I decided it was almost ready and went about getting it ready to publish and finally followed through and got it up for all to read.

12/3/24, 6:36 AM
@[New Guy in Town](/user/show/820450) Oh yeah for sure I saw the note =) I'm glad it wasn't stuck in the authors limbo for any longer! It's great as is (but at the same time I know how it is wanting to get that extra little bit of craft into a final piece!)
11/30/24, 9:42 AM
Interesting approach to how things changed after the resistance. Hope we see more Given that u talked with Swizz, is this an official continuation for the series? Or is it an AU?

12/3/24, 5:49 AM
@[zeeker8b](/user/show/15282) Thank you for your comments. This is a series so the story will continue and other characters from the universe will appear. In my conversations with Swizz, he suggested that Joe should appear since he's a popular character so I worked him in. It was easier to do so with the Nor Cal setting, putting him at Cal Berkeley on their swim team. Swizz definitely gave his blessing for this work, but as I said, my version is set in Nor Cal whereas Swizz said the original happens on the East Coast. I can say this isn't an official continuation, but wouldn't say it's an alternate universe...I don't think that captures it. I would say it's an officially sanctioned fan fiction. I actually showed Swizz a draft of this chapter so the original author signed off on my version of his story. I hope that helps and keeps you interested in where the story goes.
11/27/24, 11:16 PM
Nice to see a glimpse into the future of my favourite series.

12/3/24, 5:08 AM
@[benelliot](/user/show/909446) Thank you for commenting. Definitely some time has gone past since the events of Resistance.
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12/3/24, 3:29 AM
I wonder how long until Weston destroying Tim's moral compass comes back to bite him in the form of a betrayal. In a sense, if Tim was willing to use his powers to make Weston drop it, that could have avoided a lot of trouble for himself, but he was perhaps too scrupulous about it. Anyways, this was pretty hot! I look forward to your future works!