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Anonymous
1/7/20, 6:25 AM
so sad for Nathan :(( , but it's nice though :))
Anonymous
1/7/20, 5:37 AM
Guys, overdramatic much? This story does not reflect anyome's morals or ethics, regardless of who you were rooting for to win. This site is not some platform that requires you to represent the ideals that you believe in. If you think the world is is treterous or whatever, go voice it out on some other platform where it would actually make a difference, not shaming an auhor for expressing himself and his fantasies. Its a gay mind control story website, where the stories are meant to have people being comtrolled against their will. What else did you expect? So get over yourselves and chill out.
1/7/20, 5:36 AM
Oh this is such a great story. I love how it's written and the guy reinforces his own changes. Inspiring.
Anonymous
1/7/20, 5:10 AM
I guess in the era of Trump, villians win.
Anonymous
1/7/20, 5:09 AM
TERRIBLE ENDING! Nathan and Joe didn't deserve this at all. This was total crap in the end. The build up was a huge let down. It was like the last season of Game of Thrones. Really disappointed.
lloyd311@aol.com
1/7/20, 4:57 AM
Very nice angle on this one. Great writing and idea. Super hot. Thanks!
Anonymous
1/7/20, 4:55 AM
I'm comment Number 40. You must have done something right. Personally, I loved the writing, the exposition, the character development. I just hated the plot, because I deal with enough 'bad guys win' in my life and I would prefer my fiction to allow the 'good guys' to win. You story, unfortunately, is another reminder that the world we live in is full of assholes who triumph on a daily basis.
Anonymous
1/7/20, 4:29 AM
Duuuuuuuuuude!!!!! DYLAN CAUSED HIS OWN DEMISE! DYLAN CAUSED EVERYONE ELSE'S DEMISE! That was such a clever twist! And it wasn't just a gimmick-y twist, it made total sense. There's just something so erotically sexy and arousing with the idea that Dylan was fully aware that he was sabotaging his own path to freedom but was utterly helpless to do so anyway. I do have one question, though. Is there a particular reason why certain individuals like Shawn and Chester can shake off the mind control at times while Dylan was completely unable to? Cuz even with glasses, Chester almost betrayed Todd. I'm not complaining with the outcome but I'm just curious if you planned it? I'm not sure if you ever established the rules of your mind control mechanics during your drafts, but does it have anything to do with intelligence? I do remeber Chester making a remark in the earlier chapters where he thought the resistance is related to ones intelligence. And it would make sense too, since Dylan just seem like an easy going, high surfer dude who probably doesnt have that much brain power. In any case, congratulations on finishing your story!
Anonymous
1/7/20, 4:15 AM
Like everyone else said, fantastic ending! One thing I wish we saw more of was the scene where Nathan reconditioned Joe's mind. I wanted to see that betrayal so bad. Like maybe Nathan would've pulverized that king piece that he created to give his free will back or something. Thats just a minor nitpick though. I can't wait for the multiverse to begin.
SadReader
1/7/20, 3:54 AM
I agree with the "Maybe someday you can do a alternate world story were that happens and Todd ends up the slave of the rest of the guys~".