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Anonymous
1/7/20, 8:03 AM
I feel like Todd has been acting out of character in this chapter. Considering him snapped at his minion and how inconsiderate he was, making the school a better place doesn't sound right.
Anonymous
1/7/20, 6:26 AM
Let me just get this out of the way. I really liked the story over all though it could have had a bit more smut in it, but that's just a personal preference. The way the story was structured and the tension and twists were great and made me really want to keep on reading. It felt a lot more than the usual mind control porn with plot. The ending though was a bit of a letdown for me. Not because I was rooting for Nathan to win, but because of how bland the denoument ended up, and how Todd seemed so one dimensional. The romantic in me though would have wanted a sort of twisted happy ending for Nathan, like he wins but Todd corrupts him into wanting slaves and he ends up enslaving the school, or Nathan ends up oblivious to his enslavement because of the constant companionship he has with Joe. Overall though I am still quite pleased with the story and look forward for more of your fantastic writing.
Anonymous
1/7/20, 6:25 AM
so sad for Nathan :(( , but it's nice though :))
Anonymous
1/7/20, 5:37 AM
Guys, overdramatic much? This story does not reflect anyome's morals or ethics, regardless of who you were rooting for to win. This site is not some platform that requires you to represent the ideals that you believe in. If you think the world is is treterous or whatever, go voice it out on some other platform where it would actually make a difference, not shaming an auhor for expressing himself and his fantasies. Its a gay mind control story website, where the stories are meant to have people being comtrolled against their will. What else did you expect? So get over yourselves and chill out.
1/7/20, 5:36 AM
Oh this is such a great story. I love how it's written and the guy reinforces his own changes. Inspiring.
Anonymous
1/7/20, 5:10 AM
I guess in the era of Trump, villians win.
Anonymous
1/7/20, 5:09 AM
TERRIBLE ENDING! Nathan and Joe didn't deserve this at all. This was total crap in the end. The build up was a huge let down. It was like the last season of Game of Thrones. Really disappointed.
lloyd311@aol.com
1/7/20, 4:57 AM
Very nice angle on this one. Great writing and idea. Super hot. Thanks!
Anonymous
1/7/20, 4:55 AM
I'm comment Number 40. You must have done something right. Personally, I loved the writing, the exposition, the character development. I just hated the plot, because I deal with enough 'bad guys win' in my life and I would prefer my fiction to allow the 'good guys' to win. You story, unfortunately, is another reminder that the world we live in is full of assholes who triumph on a daily basis.
Anonymous
1/7/20, 4:29 AM
Duuuuuuuuuude!!!!! DYLAN CAUSED HIS OWN DEMISE! DYLAN CAUSED EVERYONE ELSE'S DEMISE! That was such a clever twist! And it wasn't just a gimmick-y twist, it made total sense. There's just something so erotically sexy and arousing with the idea that Dylan was fully aware that he was sabotaging his own path to freedom but was utterly helpless to do so anyway. I do have one question, though. Is there a particular reason why certain individuals like Shawn and Chester can shake off the mind control at times while Dylan was completely unable to? Cuz even with glasses, Chester almost betrayed Todd. I'm not complaining with the outcome but I'm just curious if you planned it? I'm not sure if you ever established the rules of your mind control mechanics during your drafts, but does it have anything to do with intelligence? I do remeber Chester making a remark in the earlier chapters where he thought the resistance is related to ones intelligence. And it would make sense too, since Dylan just seem like an easy going, high surfer dude who probably doesnt have that much brain power. In any case, congratulations on finishing your story!