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1/6/20, 11:41 PM
I think I don't have a lot to say but thank you! This story was a wonderful experience ^ ^ I feel sorry about the cock shrink of joe and nathan... but besides that it was an amazing series :D I keep an eye on the next series ^ ^
Swizzington
1/6/20, 11:39 PM
He is the main character in my next story.
Anonymous
1/6/20, 11:19 PM
Sorry am I missing something or is Mr. Zeiss a character I should know about?
Swizzington
1/6/20, 11:04 PM
I did try to make it seem like Dylan wasn't too happy about doing what he did to Nathan; an extension of his comments in the real world just before that. But maybe I missed the mark. He wasn't pleased about it, but he had no choice but to obey. Being snarky or showing a lack of enthusiasm is much easier than actually disobeying. Z, Zeiss' escape will be showcased in the sequel. The timelines of the two stories overlap in the middle :-)
Anonymous
1/6/20, 10:55 PM
I'll be honest, Swizz, I was worried because I didn't know how you could actually live up to the hype of the ending because there are a lot of expectations from you. But let me just say, I was wrong to have my worries. The ending felt very satisfying and I was personally happy with how everything turned out for everyone. I'm a little nervous about your next series because I don't want anything from this ending to be undone in the next one and I'm worried that things will get reversed or something. But for you, I will give your Mind Controllers a shot and fingers crossed that nothing gets reversed or any shenanigans like that Thank you so much for sharing your stories with us and it was great discovering you. You are now one of my fave authors!
Anonymous
1/6/20, 10:51 PM
i agree about the quick turn around for Dylan, with that "sure..." comment he shouldnt have so quickly been eager to correct joe's actions like he did. Also might be in the minority here but i was hoping for Nathan winning >..>
Z
1/6/20, 10:50 PM
I just read the original story that features Mr Zeiss and I gotta say I have no idea how he got here from working in that restaurant under Steve. Especially since, the last time we saw him he'd just gotten his powers locked away...
Z
1/6/20, 10:47 PM
Oh wow you really had a way with twists don't you. I love it. Also I can't believe this is set in the same universe as Slave Academy. I'm curious to see how Zeiss went from the restaurant to Todd Academy now..
nerdysuitedbaby
1/6/20, 10:34 PM
Ok a fairly interesting story. I like the fact that the glasses still kept them enslaved and even if they didn't they wouldn't be free from Todd instantly it would take a few hours. This would result in Dylan still under his control for a short time anyway. Long enough to correct the issue. However just before they entered the mind we saw Dylan offer some resistance with a sure comment. That did just come out of no where I feel especially if Todd was surprised of Dylan's assistance it seemed it wasn't planned and therefore that's a quick turn around.
LongtimeFan
1/6/20, 10:33 PM
Interesting analysis, nycboot. Fun fact: I actually saw a play once where that very thing happened--a bomb went off and killed everyone. Boy, that was a bad play. :p But this story was good! I think all of the pieces for the ending were in place--I was just hoping that Dylan would work with *Nathan*, not Todd. On TVTropes, that's called a "Diablous Ex Machina"--when something happens to defeat the good guys. I do wish the ending had been different, but then you can't always get what you want!