Recent Comments

Z
1/6/20, 9:54 PM
I should've known better than to expect Nathan to win lol. Nevertheless I'm loving this! Also, if you don't mind me asking, what story is The Further Adventures of a Mind Controller a sequel of?
Anonymous
1/6/20, 9:42 PM
I enjoyed the series overall but the ending was quite unsatisfying for me. In my opinion, the story would have been better if you had expanded upon Todd's backstory and what his motivations are. Otherwise, the ending just feels cruel for no reason. I also hope the sequel series includes some resolution for Nathan's feelings towards Joe (assuming that they're not just enslaved forever).
1/6/20, 9:23 PM
I don't think you need to work on the realism of your writing. I think it might just be helpful to be aware that you've got a talent for coming up with these highly stylized fictional universes and exaggerated characters.
LongtimeFan
1/6/20, 9:17 PM
What an ending! I can't say I got what I wanted--I was hoping for something else--but it is still an excellent story, well-written with many twists and turns. :D The final battle proved so many changes, but it all came together nicely. Congratulations on a great story, Swizzington! :D
Anonymous
1/6/20, 9:11 PM
I wont spoil the ending to those just reading, but really well done series! No matter who you were rooting for, Swizz did a great job. You deserve a lot of praise!
Swizzington
1/6/20, 9:10 PM
That's fair, Hypnothrill. Maybe something to work on. I said I was *trying* to be realistic *as possible*. I didn't say I was achieving it ;-)
Anonymous
1/6/20, 9:08 PM
To say I am happy with the ending, that would be an understatement. I don't know if I will continue to the sequel series, then ending to this one was very disappointing. You did what you wanted in the end.
1/6/20, 8:51 PM
I really like your stories, Swizzington, but I'd never describe them as "highly realistic." For one thing, everything about "Cod Cove Academy" (and its strange 13th grade program) seems highly contrived, and the characters are very broad types, who often speak like they came out of a sitcom; goody-goody Joe often sounds like a "Leave it to Beaver" character, while Chester speaks like a typical nerd character from a Saved by the Bell-era sitcom. All of which is just fine, and I think you're doing some interesting things with the genre (including giving your protagonists some very unlikeable traits). But if realism's your main goal, I don't think you're quite achieving it.
Martin
1/6/20, 8:48 PM
I can't remember having seen any other story/series which has got THAT many comments (with the exception of political/racial issues). So this is saying something. You've created something special there, Swizzington! I still haven't read all the chapters yet, since I need to be in the mood and most of all: Alone for something like that. But I will read it soon, and I'm looking forward to it!
Anonymous
1/6/20, 8:40 PM
@nycboot, I mean this site is called gay spiral, which to me actually means mind control + some kind of male homosexual acts. Don't get me wrong, I'm not bothered with the lack of sex as for me, the submission of the puppets over Todd's control is pretty hot. But I do feel its a legitimate thing for other readers to complain about. That being said, if this story is not steamy enough to some readers, then that is on them.