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Swizzington
1/6/20, 9:10 PM
That's fair, Hypnothrill. Maybe something to work on. I said I was *trying* to be realistic *as possible*. I didn't say I was achieving it ;-)
Anonymous
1/6/20, 9:08 PM
To say I am happy with the ending, that would be an understatement. I don't know if I will continue to the sequel series, then ending to this one was very disappointing. You did what you wanted in the end.
1/6/20, 8:51 PM
I really like your stories, Swizzington, but I'd never describe them as "highly realistic." For one thing, everything about "Cod Cove Academy" (and its strange 13th grade program) seems highly contrived, and the characters are very broad types, who often speak like they came out of a sitcom; goody-goody Joe often sounds like a "Leave it to Beaver" character, while Chester speaks like a typical nerd character from a Saved by the Bell-era sitcom. All of which is just fine, and I think you're doing some interesting things with the genre (including giving your protagonists some very unlikeable traits). But if realism's your main goal, I don't think you're quite achieving it.
Martin
1/6/20, 8:48 PM
I can't remember having seen any other story/series which has got THAT many comments (with the exception of political/racial issues). So this is saying something. You've created something special there, Swizzington! I still haven't read all the chapters yet, since I need to be in the mood and most of all: Alone for something like that. But I will read it soon, and I'm looking forward to it!
Anonymous
1/6/20, 8:40 PM
@nycboot, I mean this site is called gay spiral, which to me actually means mind control + some kind of male homosexual acts. Don't get me wrong, I'm not bothered with the lack of sex as for me, the submission of the puppets over Todd's control is pretty hot. But I do feel its a legitimate thing for other readers to complain about. That being said, if this story is not steamy enough to some readers, then that is on them.
Swizzington
1/6/20, 8:32 PM
When I write these stories, I try to make them seem as 'realistic' as possible. I think mind control is at its hottest when it is as plausible as it can be, if that makes sense. I want it to seem like a real world setting, not some made up porn nonsense. To that end, there is sometimes not going to be endless sex scenes. Sure, sometimes a horny teenager is going to make his slave suck his dick, that's to be expected, but surely, there is more to it than that :-) P.S.: Chapter 10 has been submitted for approval. Just waiting for the site overlords to make it live now.
Anonymous
1/6/20, 8:29 PM
Swizzington just ignore these harsh critics. Many of them never wrote or came up with a story arc. They think anyone can write and find fault with everything. I didn't like the story to begin with but as I read this story further, I am loving the story more.
Dawnhish
1/6/20, 8:27 PM
As they say in my language, I'll cut the bull's head, and say that I myself enjoy getting off over simple mind control rather than the sex part. Sometimes, the story for me gets ruined by the focus on the sexual part rather than the brainwash,—even though there are many stories where the two things are balanced out. As for this story, it's really hot on its own, and I really look forward to the ending.
nycboot
1/6/20, 8:23 PM
There are many sexually arousing stories on this site, but it does not claim to be a sex site, so one should **not** expect sex or even a sexual component. It's about mind control. Believe it or not, many of us find mind control sometimes more arousing than a sexual encounter. That's what fetishism is about: sexualizing something other than sexual acts.
Anonymous
1/6/20, 8:14 PM
This was a well written story, but where is the sex? Do you all get off just hearing about generic mind control? The few sex scenes are usually mentioned in the middle of the act and quickly concluded. I thought the brother would get fucked by the Room Service guy, not serve dinner. Respectfully, I came here for a hot story, not a psychology lesson. Todd might be a mean dork, with terrible fashion, but just about NOTHING sexual happens. He's wasting his potential. The author said that he partially took over the therapist's office because it would be a good place for sex. Where is the sex? Very odd how popular this story is on this site. I'll wait for the final chapter, but keep my pants buttoned. PLease keep writing. I like what I like, but you are the boss of your story. I just wanted something sexually stimulating. I will give you credit on your creativity, which has made this mentally stimulating. For such a young author, you know how to craft an idea. What I am trying to say is that this is not the story I expected, but it delivers on your vision.