Recent Comments

Anonymous
1/6/20, 8:29 PM
Swizzington just ignore these harsh critics. Many of them never wrote or came up with a story arc. They think anyone can write and find fault with everything. I didn't like the story to begin with but as I read this story further, I am loving the story more.
Dawnhish
1/6/20, 8:27 PM
As they say in my language, I'll cut the bull's head, and say that I myself enjoy getting off over simple mind control rather than the sex part. Sometimes, the story for me gets ruined by the focus on the sexual part rather than the brainwash,—even though there are many stories where the two things are balanced out. As for this story, it's really hot on its own, and I really look forward to the ending.
nycboot
1/6/20, 8:23 PM
There are many sexually arousing stories on this site, but it does not claim to be a sex site, so one should **not** expect sex or even a sexual component. It's about mind control. Believe it or not, many of us find mind control sometimes more arousing than a sexual encounter. That's what fetishism is about: sexualizing something other than sexual acts.
Anonymous
1/6/20, 8:14 PM
This was a well written story, but where is the sex? Do you all get off just hearing about generic mind control? The few sex scenes are usually mentioned in the middle of the act and quickly concluded. I thought the brother would get fucked by the Room Service guy, not serve dinner. Respectfully, I came here for a hot story, not a psychology lesson. Todd might be a mean dork, with terrible fashion, but just about NOTHING sexual happens. He's wasting his potential. The author said that he partially took over the therapist's office because it would be a good place for sex. Where is the sex? Very odd how popular this story is on this site. I'll wait for the final chapter, but keep my pants buttoned. PLease keep writing. I like what I like, but you are the boss of your story. I just wanted something sexually stimulating. I will give you credit on your creativity, which has made this mentally stimulating. For such a young author, you know how to craft an idea. What I am trying to say is that this is not the story I expected, but it delivers on your vision.
Anonymous
1/6/20, 7:50 PM
And just to respond from the above comments too, my "criticism" is not meant to be a malicious thing or to tear and destroy the author's work. I was just merely stating my opinion and trying to offer a different perspective and I hope its not being misconstrued as such.
Anonymous
1/6/20, 7:33 PM
This was great and original.
Swizzington
1/6/20, 7:29 PM
Willie Cici, thank you for your support. I appreciate it a lot. I don't think I ever actually apologized, though :-) I think sometimes people make fair criticisms and actually I invite that. When people talk about inconsistent characters and the pacing being off, that is the type of feedback that I welcome. I might not always *agree* with the person, but it is good to be able to have those discussions and think about it for future stories. Like I say, I'm definitely not perfect, and I'm always trying to learn and get better. The only thing that is frustrating to me is when people get upset because they don't get the specific outcome they wanted. I can't please everyone!
Willie Cici
1/6/20, 7:25 PM
I recently posted a comment on another author's story line. As I was writing that comment, I remembered that I had posted this story, hoping to see how the readers and writers of this blog would respond. I had not checked out the story for a couple of weeks. I was sad to find no one ever tried to add a chapter. No one ever commented on the story, except one reader who 'can't wait to see how this goes'. Those who can, do; those who can't, criticize. Has no one the creative juices necessary to craft a story arc, write a story, edit, draft some more, edit some more and finish a product? The germ of the story has so much potential. What gives? I know the answer to the rhetorical question I posed: Those who can, do; those who can't, criticize.
Willie Cici
1/6/20, 7:18 PM
Dear Author - Don't ever apologize for your writing. I am often reminded, in my daily life, of the old adage: those who can, do; those who can't teach. There is a variation on this adage that applies well under these circumstances - those who can't, criticize. There are many 'critics' on this blog. They don't have the balls to craft a story arc, write a story, edit, draft some more, edit some more and finish a product. At least, you try, and, as far as I am concerned, succeed. For that alone, don't apologize. I never do. Fuck the critics!! I write my stories for fun -- my fun. I share them on this site. If people like them, great. If people don't, that's okay too. At least, you and I are writing. Keep writing. You will have at least one fan who loves reading your stories. Hell! I read this last chapter three times before i wrote this comment. I'm only sorry I have to wait for the next chapter.
Goodboy
1/6/20, 7:08 PM
is it weird that i want Todd to win?