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nycboot
1/6/20, 1:16 PM
The more I think of it, the more I realize that Dylan is just playing along. The serum should have worn off the previous night. Also in the previous chapter we saw Nathan like we had never seen him: full of anger and rage - and that's what got him through to Joe without touching him. If Nathan can just summon that fury with Todd, it might lead to a satisfying outcome: Perhaps what Todd really needs is to become the slave he projects on others - maybe that's the only way he can really function in this world. I'm hoping that Chester and Joe stick the serum gun (on the permanent setting) into Todd. So long as I'm over-thinking things, I was thinking that the key to Todd's power is really Chester. If somehow Nathan or Dylan can undo Todd's influence in Chester that would really turn things. (At one point I was thinking Nathan would end up with Chester, but Chester seems to be very asexual, so that's unlikely.) Joe was apparently disgusted by the sexual activity, but he still needs dominance, so what is going to be the outcome for Nathan's relationship with him? As I said before, a real interesting cliffhanger! And yeah, the enjoyment of this story has increased with being able to interact with you Swizz (or should I say Swizzle?) and the others on here. :)
K
1/6/20, 12:31 PM
I'm so confused!!! hahaha I really curious about what going to be happen I don't want Nathan to become like Todd. A little selfish is fine but please don't become a psychopath or become Todd slave I'm still on Nathan side he may not be a real good person but for me he way better than Todd
Anonymous
1/6/20, 11:47 AM
Moreee!
nycboot
1/6/20, 11:26 AM
Gads, what a cliffhanger! But it's a good turn of events in that Nathan can't depend on anyone but himself.
LongtimeFan
1/6/20, 11:02 AM
Oh boy! I must confess I was refreshing the page a lot today. It's so exciting to anticipate the next chapter! And it certainly delivered...so many questions. Did Todd find out about Nathan freeing Joe? Is Joe acting? What role will Chester play (you're really good, Swizzington dear--I didn't even consider Chester a possible resistance member!)? And, of course, who will win in the big battle? Two more points. One: I like that you chose to have Nathan tempted to use his powers sexually on Joe...but ultimately choose not to. Yes, the temptation is there, and he did use it for homework, but that's nothing compared to Todd. Granted, the ending could be like "Be a Good Boy," where the mind-controlling character who was "good" ends up becoming more tyrannical than usual, but still, it shows that Nathan, while flawed, has a core of goodness that Todd lacks. Especially summarized in the stakes of the battle: Todd fights to take control and rule. Nathan fights to help and save his friends. And two: I love reading the comments on these stories almost as much as the stories themselves! It's great to have a conversation going, and see everyone's ideas taking form. It's been a pleasure talking to all of you! :)
1/6/20, 9:43 AM
There was no struggle and a good person was completely destroyed. Guilty pleasure. Made me upset.
Anonymous
1/6/20, 7:17 AM
Your plotting skills are excellent. Yeah, this may be a weird comparison, but Todd kinda reminds me of Walter White from Breaking Bad, mostly in a way where both characters are clearly immoral and are doing horrendous actions, but you cheer for them because the society they live in has mistreated them so badly. So I guess if the parallels are the same with both characters, it does look like Todd will meet a downfall eventually.... i guess we just have to enjoy these moments while Todd is still on top.
Anonymous
1/6/20, 6:03 AM
Would love to see either of these two caged and plugged.
Slavethruhypno@yahoo.com
1/6/20, 5:58 AM
Todd is not so much evil as an extremely selfish narcissist. i like that about him. I hope Nathan does not win out. He would make a much better pet for Todd.
M
1/6/20, 5:23 AM
Ahh, satisfaction is so sweet! The brotherly showdown is very believable yet it was not predictable! I enjoyed definitively showing that Dylan's bluster is completely supported by the mental battle's events. He would have won, if not for Todd's actual trump card, Chester's serum. And Chester's glasses. Hell, just Chester in General! i was looking forward to seeing the subjugation of Chester this chapter, but i am completely pleased to know it is something to look forward to. I am still not any more enamored towards Nathan yet, so I don't know if I want to go so far as to root for him to triumph, but i can see how he might be a valid threat. Nathan is not cocky in relation to Todd, so he's not likely to allow himself to be caught facing down with Todd with all his cronies in tow. this story is so gratifying in its complexity and how it also panders to my love of an unredeemable protagonist. Todd is a horrible person, unapologetic, and has the power to get away with it. He gets to get away with all the bad behavior I cannot because i need to conform to social rules. His horrific actions as well as personality are so liberating and why I hope he stays on top.