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Swizzington
1/5/20, 12:58 AM
Well, Nathan did mention he had never heard anyone use the word 'shizzle' before, nycboot. An ill-advised affectation on Dylan's part, perhaps :-)
LongtimeFan
1/5/20, 12:48 AM
Ha ha, thank you, Swizzington! As Mr. New York (nyc) said, I read this stories analytically, searching for every possible clue. You write thrillers and mysteries, and that's my favorite genre--rule number one is "notice every detail." And you write them *well*, because you hide hints about things in every chapter (we got the first idea that this was a genetic power all the way back in Chapter 2, when Todd snapped that Nathan must have already changed Joe in some way). As others have said, you do an excellent job painting the characters, too; I could see Dylan perfectly (he reminds me so much of a dear friend of mine...). There can't be a totally happy ending, of course, but I do have hope yet...
1/5/20, 12:33 AM
nothing much happened??? We saw nathan power in action, dylan sansei and joey finally having some sex in a not "robot kind" state... it is something for sure... anyway I just wait for the next chapter now :3
nycboot
1/5/20, 12:29 AM
I'm still trying to get over "shizzle." This is 2020, not 1955. :) Or maybe it's a pun on your screen name - Swizzle? Whatever it is, regarding Dylan, when you really want to draw a picture of a character it comes out so well and distinctive. That's one thing that makes these stories so enjoyable. It's kind of like you taking us into your mind. :) It also explains why Todd has never tried to do anything to Nathan, knowing that he probably can't. This story reminds me of those kinds of movies where the entire length of the film is devoted to tracking down the McGuffin (that's also the "secret" behind all those Harry Potter books, whose plots are really only a quarter to a third of their published lengths). Like "LongtimeFan" I have suspected an ending like "How To Be a Good Boy." Or like the Brian de Palma movie "Sisters" where the evil doctor is killed, but his hypnosis continues on ("there was no body because there was no murder!") Unlike others I don't mind the lack of sex - this is a mind control site, not a sex-only a site. And when you think of it, when you rob someone of their mind, what kind of sex can you or they have? It's just mechanical, whereas there's not much possibility for emotional connection. I am hoping that something happens and Todd is the one that receives the serum. Again, thanks for an engrossing story. It makes me want to go back to your previous work and look at it more closely.
Swizzington
1/5/20, 12:09 AM
I am glad at least one person remembered about the Mike gas :-) As nothing much happened in this chapter, I will be releasing chapter 8 shortly. Just going to do a final proofreading. Hopefully one of the site overlords is awake to approve it!
Anonymous
1/4/20, 11:50 PM
I love Dylan it's perfect
LongtimeFan
1/4/20, 11:26 PM
I like it! Here are my guesses as to what will happen: Nathan will manage to touch Joe's head but not break the control. The serum will allow Todd to overpower Dylan briefly, and they'll fight--and then Todd will use the personality gas he stole from Mike to defeat him (oh, my dear Swizzington, you are SO good at loading Chekhov's Guns). ;p Although, given what happened in "How to be a Good Boy," I wonder if Dylan built in some kind of protection just in case...either that, or Todd's impatience and arrogance (which we see happening with the spy bug breaking because he rushed Chester) will cause a glitch, like the serum not working or lasting forever. And it all builds to a big final showdown between Nathan and Todd! I certainly am excited to see what happens!
FemaleFartslut
1/4/20, 11:06 PM
Absolutely loved it! There aren't enough stories like this and I love how you write them - I hope you continue to write more! <3
Anonymous
1/4/20, 10:36 PM
Next chapter pleassssssse
Anonymous
1/4/20, 10:24 PM
"Artificial" race change (trying to look like another race) to fix the cognitive dissonance he's now experiencing...extremely hot