Recent Comments

1/2/20, 9:56 PM
Great episode! Cops are a hot idea although making the chief into a huge gay muscle bear daddy would be amazing. Maybe the entire police force turns gay/bi?
1/2/20, 9:41 PM
Nicely done. You write really well!
Anonymous
1/2/20, 9:04 PM
Really hot, i'm courious how this will continue? But i'm hoping that it goes on
LeadPb
1/2/20, 8:30 PM
@nycboot, isn't Amelia Chester's mother? So far Todd's mother hasn't made an appearance yet. And no hurry, Swizzington. Your works are great, but take your time with it. Rushing is rarely good. :*
firesix
1/2/20, 8:16 PM
Loved it. Almost nothing is better than a manly man turning into a dumb slut. I really hope you keep writing, I get so happy and excited every time I notice you've posted :-)
Anonymous
1/2/20, 8:10 PM
Yes, everyone will not like every decision but the writing is fantastic. Some of the best on this site. Thank you for sharing your work and looking forward to the next chapters!
Swizzington
1/2/20, 8:09 PM
That's an interesting comment, LongtimeFan. What is it about mothers in particular that bothers you? I know some people don't like having women mentioned AT ALL. I acknowledge that opinion, but to me, that doesn't seem realistic. For these longer, multi-chaptered stories, there are sometimes going to be women around, and sometimes the villain needs to bring them under control for pragmatic reasons. I try to write to my audience, and keep that type of thing to a minimum. But like I say, sometimes it's necessary :-)
1/2/20, 8:06 PM
Hmmmmmm, thanks for the explanation! I was wondering, makes sense given Mike's personality.(And Chad's)
LongtimeFan
1/2/20, 7:47 PM
As others have said, I love the writing and hate Todd. :p You are doing an excellent job at making him a classic narcissist and solipsist ("only he was special"), and I always dislike those characters, especially when they are essentially overpowered and can't be defeated (although here's hoping!). I am eager to see where this goes! And remember--write what YOU want to write, and at least one person will be happy. :) P.S. Does anyone else get weirdly upset when women and especially mothers are mind-controlled in these stories? Or is that a me thing?
Swizzington
1/2/20, 7:14 PM
I did not make a mistake, but perhaps I did not make it clear enough. Barbara is Nathan's aunt and Todd's mother. Todd and Nathan are cousins. Amelia is Chester's mother. Chester and Nathan are not related in anyway, they're just friends. Todd's mother is mentioned but never actually appears in the story. This will probably become clearer later on. When speaking with his mother, Nathan is working under the assumption that Todd's mother has moved to town with him. But this is not the case. Todd is living at Chester's house. Joe will not be lobotomized for much longer, although he will continue to serve Todd in other ways. Ways that require him to act like himself :-)