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Swizzington
1/2/20, 8:09 PM
That's an interesting comment, LongtimeFan. What is it about mothers in particular that bothers you? I know some people don't like having women mentioned AT ALL. I acknowledge that opinion, but to me, that doesn't seem realistic. For these longer, multi-chaptered stories, there are sometimes going to be women around, and sometimes the villain needs to bring them under control for pragmatic reasons. I try to write to my audience, and keep that type of thing to a minimum. But like I say, sometimes it's necessary :-)
1/2/20, 8:06 PM
Hmmmmmm, thanks for the explanation! I was wondering, makes sense given Mike's personality.(And Chad's)
LongtimeFan
1/2/20, 7:47 PM
As others have said, I love the writing and hate Todd. :p You are doing an excellent job at making him a classic narcissist and solipsist ("only he was special"), and I always dislike those characters, especially when they are essentially overpowered and can't be defeated (although here's hoping!). I am eager to see where this goes! And remember--write what YOU want to write, and at least one person will be happy. :) P.S. Does anyone else get weirdly upset when women and especially mothers are mind-controlled in these stories? Or is that a me thing?
Swizzington
1/2/20, 7:14 PM
I did not make a mistake, but perhaps I did not make it clear enough. Barbara is Nathan's aunt and Todd's mother. Todd and Nathan are cousins. Amelia is Chester's mother. Chester and Nathan are not related in anyway, they're just friends. Todd's mother is mentioned but never actually appears in the story. This will probably become clearer later on. When speaking with his mother, Nathan is working under the assumption that Todd's mother has moved to town with him. But this is not the case. Todd is living at Chester's house. Joe will not be lobotomized for much longer, although he will continue to serve Todd in other ways. Ways that require him to act like himself :-)
Anonymous
1/2/20, 6:47 PM
continue, please
Anonymous
1/2/20, 6:39 PM
p.s. I'm the same guy
Anonymous
1/2/20, 6:28 PM
If I may suggest something: 2 cops are passing by, the good cop gets some more muscular mass and a better wife (she was cheating on him with his partner but Colin put a stop to it) and then punishes the partner by turning him into the Police department's bitch, with the police chief (a gay man) as his daddy, so, what do you think?
nycboot
1/2/20, 6:02 PM
Hi Swizz, your characterization of Todd reminds me of Anthony in "It's a Good Life" (the famous Twilight Zone episode with Bill Mumy as the boy who could will anything). But it's so over-the-top I'm almost numb to any more depravity and horror. I suppose your initial characterization of Joe was intended to be a little disapproving - he's too goody-goody, but it's sure painful remembering what he went through and watching him as a lobotomized human (although you've made it clear that Todd's current power is temporarily). I don't feel that way with Shawn. Hopefully Chester's device will be administered to Todd on setting #3. Also did you make a mistake? Nathan and his mother remembered her sister's name as Barbara, but in Todd's house she's Amelia.
Anonymous
1/2/20, 5:41 PM
Love a series of good dumb twink tfs! Mikey and Matty were the highlights--definitely the best developed of the bunch.
Lusty Stallion
1/2/20, 5:39 PM
you certainly can. i'll see if a nice cop transformation can be worked into chapter 3 which ive only recently started.maybe a couple of days till the next one