Recent Comments

TcomJ
12/18/19, 4:38 PM
dude, you are like the few of writers here that I find I am looking forward to read even if the series is long. and you know what? write more. lol Is he going back to get Lucas and the original boys back? :p
Bibimbap
12/18/19, 4:01 PM
Give us a new chapter, please! or at least some sort of ending! that would be a shame, since this story is quite good, but don't let it unfinished, please!
joaopomilio@hotmail.com
12/18/19, 4:00 PM
the person above has a point
Anonymous
12/18/19, 3:54 PM
i feel like i was teased super hard, you said all the sex and stuff would come later. pretty much nothing but vanilla sex, it was mostly story. complete different turn then your usual stories. Little bummed i became so invested in this for a boring payoff.
12/18/19, 8:41 AM
I generally liked it. I found the non-linear narrative in this post a bit hard to follow, but I thought it was kinda sweet. What I didn't like was the deus ex machina, but I'm not sure I would've liked it without ... I have issues either way. That said, both Marvel and DC have their One Above All / Presence, so it certainly fit with the general comic book idea.
12/18/19, 8:32 AM
@Mark I am so yes interested in the sex dating! That there is a site for this is making of the cock of me hornyhard in my underwearing. I also have love being a real flesh-person so I CAN go on sex dates like my friend Mark. гомосексуальный
joaopomilio@hotmail.com
12/18/19, 8:22 AM
not bad, I like the story, but, part of me wished that Omen was still gay as well or at least that it was clear he was still gay
12/18/19, 5:17 AM
Clickbaiting is not what the tags are for. Its fine as a hint in synopsis but as an actual tag, no, I think its wrong.
AgingAthlete
12/18/19, 3:31 AM
Thanks for the comments. Snuff: well, I did a bit of clickbaiting here. I frankly don't like snuff stories as they take things a bit too far for my tastes. That said, I liked the idea of *toying* with the concept, which is what this is. Apologies to anyone hoping for a death. That said, now I am thinking of an actual snuff story where the snuffed sub comes back as a very angry, and powerful, ghost top. How does that sound? Short: I was working towards a sort of 'O. Henry' kind of thing: short, sweet and surprising. Also, I thought the hidden dialog (see original story) might get tedious for the reader if it went too long.
12/18/19, 2:49 AM
I really love the idea and format of the story here, but I feel like it could be just a hair longer. Maybe there could be more hints to that "snuff" situation past of the suspect's refutal, or maybe there could be a more detailed sex scene near the end. Granted, the latter would be harder considering that you're only using dialogue to propel the story, but check out Wesley Bracken's "Letters from Prison" to see how he does it. Again, this is an awesome idea, and I hope you keep running with it!