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Anonymous
12/18/19, 6:57 PM
Such a sweet and holesome ending!
12/18/19, 6:48 PM
fair points in the comments. i hope y'all still got something out of it ^^
Anonymous
12/18/19, 6:21 PM
Good start to the story, but the ending felt like a solid, meh. There was all this buildup and then it felt like you weren't sure how to finish it.
12/18/19, 6:17 PM
All I'm saying at this point is that there will be a bit of a shift in the story over the next few chapters. The lead FBI agent knows damned well that something is up, and Peter knows that she knows, even if she can't prove it yet. What would you do if you were doing something highly illegal and knew that the FBI was holding a grudge towards you?
12/18/19, 4:54 PM
Bibimbap, there is more coming, I promise! The next chapter is almost done. I've been traveling for wonderful reasons and also dealing with a personal tragedy. So I'm a little behind. But I have every intention of finishing the story. There are new characters coming and the mystery of why this is happening will become apparent. Its all in my head, I just need to find the time to type it out. I'm traveling and will he home just after Christmas. Expect more then. Have a happy holiday!
TcomJ
12/18/19, 4:38 PM
dude, you are like the few of writers here that I find I am looking forward to read even if the series is long. and you know what? write more. lol Is he going back to get Lucas and the original boys back? :p
Bibimbap
12/18/19, 4:01 PM
Give us a new chapter, please! or at least some sort of ending! that would be a shame, since this story is quite good, but don't let it unfinished, please!
joaopomilio@hotmail.com
12/18/19, 4:00 PM
the person above has a point
Anonymous
12/18/19, 3:54 PM
i feel like i was teased super hard, you said all the sex and stuff would come later. pretty much nothing but vanilla sex, it was mostly story. complete different turn then your usual stories. Little bummed i became so invested in this for a boring payoff.
12/18/19, 8:41 AM
I generally liked it. I found the non-linear narrative in this post a bit hard to follow, but I thought it was kinda sweet. What I didn't like was the deus ex machina, but I'm not sure I would've liked it without ... I have issues either way. That said, both Marvel and DC have their One Above All / Presence, so it certainly fit with the general comic book idea.