Please please PLEASE tell me there will be a part 2

This is way too much going on too fast, but it still got me off

damn this was 🔥

Lol it was hot but I got so lost in this. I have no idea what happened after you mentioned superheroes 😆

Hopefully Sven gets *fucked stupid*, he really deserves it.

Nocturne13 - yep. I feel the same way. The end isn't very organic. Honestly, I didn't plan this story, it sorta took me in its own direction, and I feel like I lost the thread at the end. Thank you for the honest criticism, and I'm glad you enjoyed it - maybe someday I'll come back and give it the ending it deserves.

Do you plan on continuing this story?

I really liked the story, it was well paced and very sensual even though there wasn't any sex. There was good foreshadowing that Mick was getting a real hook into him, though of course the steel trap that closed at the end was a twist. I have some minor comments for at the end which I just want to share as constructive thoughts, they're detailed but just because I want to give you some serious technical feedback; the story was plenty hot as it was! I felt that Howie lost his human consciousness a little bit too fast to savor. Just a tiny bit. The last sort of clear thought he has is that Mick's into pup play and there will be gear involved, then he's already barking since that was apparently pre-programmed into him. I would have liked just a few more thoughts that maybe pup play would be fun and really he just wants Mick bad, and if that's what he wants it's worth it, but then his thoughts start to fragment and he realizes to his horror it's not a scene Mick has in mind but permanent enslavement and he's already almost over the edge and barking (and not even getting fucked first!)... that moment where someone is about to go over the edge and lose themselves should, I think, be focused on, detailed, and savored. It's like holding off for one last second before an orgasm to make it really explosive and I think the mental process in those moments as you wrote it was more falling down a curved slope than falling off a cliff, and I think it could have been 1% more powerful if Howie hung there just one last moment and then fell. At one point in the final sequence he's at Mick's feet licking his boots and suddenly Mick is squeezing his cock and balls and that is a little jarring because it sounds like he's now naked and also he was on the floor licking boots so when did Mick grab him? Shouldn't he have just about shot his load when he's grabbed while his cock is iron bar hard from excitement? It's not clear to me if he's already zoning out here and Mick stripped him or if you just skipped over something there but it broke my attention and made me back up in case I skimmed something too fast. Going along with that, having him already collared at the very end and Mick just putting tags on him on the one hand shows his consciousness is almost zeroed, but it also gave up the opportunity of having that finality of him being collared. So I feel like those last few paragraphs maybe could have stood a little more smoothing out. Overall though REALLY hot.

Well, I saw how much people loved Leo in Path 4, and decided, well, gonna write a path where he is the one in power! They will probably do something with it. and with three storyline I was doing at the same time (more a personal story), clearly one would interest me less and get hijacked. Anyone interested, write you own stuff, not gonna continue this for a while, even if I wanna.

Premise building up nicely!!! Great story!!!