Recent Comments

11/8/19, 8:25 PM
What's the problem? I like constructive criticism, so do explain what is too much present, so I can put less in the next chapter(s).
Anonymous
11/8/19, 8:07 PM
You try to read Hypno-Tales stories or mafisto and then we talk about the size or the info dumps.
Anonymous
11/8/19, 5:39 PM
to much in one story
joaopomilio@hotmail.com
11/8/19, 4:41 PM
ouch, that sucks, I hope you recover the computer soon
malskin
11/8/19, 4:31 PM
thanks for this chapter from the pervious chapter Bill the Boss has worked hard on Mark to get him to the point where more direct action was needed. got a sticky keyboard here. i am liking how Mark AKAA Marky was more than happy to dress in dirty jeans and wifebeater - the new Mark seems to have a evil streak in him, (β€œ*You want this, don’t you boy?” He asked, a cruel smile creeping over his face.)* making me wonder what else Bill has got in store for Marky. i also liked how Marky went back to work as if he now part of the work gang.
11/8/19, 4:07 PM
Yes * /// * but right now someone in mu house stole my computer and I'm waiting to get it back :(
11/8/19, 4:07 PM
> why blue ball us to the big event! Trust me, I'm blue balled too. I wasn't planning a multiple part story but it is growing like that. just lie back and take the edging, I'll drain those balls... eventually!
11/8/19, 4:02 PM
This chapter has been great. Can't wait for the next one :D
11/8/19, 4:02 PM
Do you plan to continue your Will takeover story? Because both stories are really cool and I can't wait to see what happens!
Anonymous
11/8/19, 1:22 PM
It would be nice to see more of an internal conflict with the patent. to draw that out more. But a great start.