Recent Comments

Oct 27, 2019
tiny tim
10/27/19, 9:59 PM
To much going-on, starts to be confusing & unfocused so it soon loses its 'erotic' qualities. Have to admit I stopped reading it half way through....Sorry
Oct 27, 2019
10/27/19, 8:10 PM
I really did like the first half of the story. I just think that a mid-story viewpoint shift is incredibly difficult to execute effectively. It's one of those advanced moves that I'd recommend avoiding until you get more experience as a writer.
Oct 27, 2019
sergio10andrade@gmail.com
10/27/19, 7:41 PM
From Malemann54 I wanted to shift the viewpoint from Larry, the guy who the action was happening to to the guys who were doing the action. Not much experience writing stories am just trying to write the types of stories I like to read.
Anonymous
10/27/19, 7:22 PM
Please, please tell me that you will write more! This is awesome!
Anonymous
10/27/19, 6:22 PM
continue please
10/27/19, 6:09 PM
hey Hypnothrill! first of all, thanks a lot for this great hot new idea. make a bump in my underwear. :-) the next story is still at work. maybe your idea will used in a further story. ;-) nice to
Oct 27, 2019
Mutabear
10/27/19, 5:41 PM
This has an interesting idea but it is far too difficult to read.
Alex
10/27/19, 5:01 PM
Definitely one of the more original stories. i loved every moment of this one.
Anonymous
10/27/19, 4:53 PM
I liked it! Very much. Wish it had been longer or maybe two parts (Still opportunity),
10/27/19, 2:01 PM
Pretty hot story! I love the stuff with the slaves repeating their mantra. Too bad that the new slave was brought in with a gag in his mouth, because some dialogue where he's trying to resist could have made this even hotter (especially if the two men who are already hypno-collared are his former friends, who don't recognize him anymore).