Recent Comments

jeep4191@gmail.com
10/28/19, 2:32 AM
nycboot, Thank you for following the story... I tend to make chapters brief when packing in a lot of detail because I want readers to continue, and have found that it helps me be more succinct... believe me, in my head I have tons of backstory for all the characters and this entire reality. Who knows, maybe some day I'll expand one of these into a real book...
nycboot
10/28/19, 1:35 AM
The chapters are so brief but they're filled with such interesting content! Can't wait for more - and thank you!
Anonymous
10/28/19, 1:33 AM
I'm not really one for piss or scat, so didn't really care for this one. Keep on adding to the story, though - the first two chapters really turned my crank!
jeep4191@gmail.com
10/28/19, 1:26 AM
PupScout, Stick with the story... the culling of Varu from the pack was a tough decision for me as an author, but it was needed to move the plot forward. Hope you'll understand it better as the story moves forward...
10/27/19, 10:49 PM
I liked the new pups addition. The cannabilization of the brother was hard to take, but I'll wait to see why it had to be done. I do enjoy this story. I like primal pack.
joaopomilio@hotmail.com
10/27/19, 10:29 PM
will we see part 3?
Oct 27, 2019
tiny tim
10/27/19, 9:59 PM
To much going-on, starts to be confusing & unfocused so it soon loses its 'erotic' qualities. Have to admit I stopped reading it half way through....Sorry
Oct 27, 2019
10/27/19, 8:10 PM
I really did like the first half of the story. I just think that a mid-story viewpoint shift is incredibly difficult to execute effectively. It's one of those advanced moves that I'd recommend avoiding until you get more experience as a writer.
Oct 27, 2019
sergio10andrade@gmail.com
10/27/19, 7:41 PM
From Malemann54 I wanted to shift the viewpoint from Larry, the guy who the action was happening to to the guys who were doing the action. Not much experience writing stories am just trying to write the types of stories I like to read.
Anonymous
10/27/19, 7:22 PM
Please, please tell me that you will write more! This is awesome!