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EntrancedGay92
10/27/19, 1:53 PM
Well done! A fantasy of mine.
Oct 27, 2019
10/27/19, 1:49 PM
This starts out strong, with an interesting premise, but it gets incredibly confusing midway through. Why does it suddenly shift from 1st person narration to 3rd person dialogue?
EntrancedGay92
10/27/19, 1:45 PM
Nice premise and it's an original take on the incest stories (which I can never get enough of). I would enjoy reading a backstory on this family.
10/27/19, 1:35 PM
The sex and transformation scenes were really hot! I just didn't really like the big dump of expository dialogue at the end. Do you have to spell out all the rules of how this curse/disease works? Can't John just have a sudden instinctive urge to fuck some virgin ass? (Also, it would have been helpful to have a paragraph near the beginning explaining how and why John is an anal virgin, since that turns out to be such a pivotal plot point).
10/27/19, 1:21 PM
I think that what you've written is very hot, but to me, it doesn't feel like a complete story. There's no build-up to Thomas walking into the bathroom, which means there's no suspense and no chance to know who these characters were before we get into the sex and corruption. Also, the paragraph of authorial remarks at the beginning was a bit distracting, especially since it used the same formatting as the actual story.
anongingerdude
10/27/19, 11:25 AM
ive cum to this story so many times, but especially this chapter, the full transition into being a HAIRY JOCK BOY makes me climax so hard...!
ForgottenCradle
10/27/19, 11:05 AM
this was beautiful. I'm thrilled to see anything more of this sometime
Papa Werebear
10/27/19, 6:14 AM
Truly, I'm enjoying this story. It has much promise and it has themes I have already incorporated into my own works. Thank you, please do continue, I'm eager to see where you take this story.
10/27/19, 5:35 AM
That was truly awesome and a fantasy fulfilled
Alex
10/27/19, 3:42 AM
I love this story and idea so much! obese continue