fuck yeah keep it cumming !

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This has a really hot beginning. I look forward to seeing where it goes.

TcomJ I'm having a confusing time with your comment. In some stories, the writer likes the surprise the reader by introducing an unexpected element or surprise. Let's take "The Terminator" for example. Sarah Connor is living a normal day to day existence. She feels that she's being stalked by some creepy skinny guy. She hides out in a disco. And quite unexpectedly, a massive bodybuilder is trying to kill her. On top of that, that skinny stalker creep tells her that the body builder is actually a cyborg! When movie goers saw this in 1984, they were taken by surprise. It created a sorta thrill by disorienting the audience and forcing them to suddenly readjust their expectation. Namely, the skinny creepy guy might actually be the hero. And that brute of a killer is actually an unstoppable robot. Now if you remember, Terminator actually begins with a title card. It reads: "The machines rose from the ashes of the nuclear fire. Their war to exterminate mankind had raged for decades, but the final battle would not be fought in the future. It would be fought here, in our present. Tonight..." So what you're saying, TcomJ ... is for people that require a ridiculous amount of foreshadowing, the title card should have read: "The machines rose from the ashes of the nuclear fire. Their war to exterminate mankind had raged for decades, but the final battle would not be fought in the future. It would be fought here, in our present. Tonight, a machine will be sent back in time, disguised as a human being, programmed to kill the mother (Sarah Connor) of the future general that will defeat the machines." For one, if James Cameron had included a title card that would suit your level of foreshadowing, it would have ruined the movie. Sometimes, the reader needs to be thrown off balance. And in this case, that's how my story works. If you aren't into that kind of storytelling, then I suggest you find authors that better suit your tastes.

Can we get a transformation of a cute young white guy getting turned into a fat hairy Indian turbaned Sikh man

I'm a sucker for "supervillain slowly corrupts hero team" stories, and the way that Sam gave himself up because of his crush just made it better.

This was really hot

the problem wasn't that I didnt read chapter 4. I already read the whole series and I didnt have a problem until this chapter. You skip the time from Chapter 4 where the truck driver with the kid then just jump all the way to rubber soldier being introduced and the driver is on the run from them out of nowhere. There was no foreshadowing or anything of sort. It feels like it was so needed to be add in asap because well just wanting to do it.

Really would love to see more of this! Very hot!

thank you again for the feedback, it's honestly keeping me going and I'm loving writing again! Just submitted Part V!