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Martin
10/18/19, 2:20 PM
What an incredible story. You've created a nice universe I'd like to learn more about. The only thing, if I may criticize one thing, is that the reader is very close to Lupin at the beginning, being close to his thoughts and motivations. But when he's turned into a slutty himbo, the story somehow distances itself from its protagonist - and I'd loved to remain as close to his mind as possible. To get into his slutty mindset. That's what I'd like to get out of such a story. I know perfectly well how difficult it is to write something from the perspective of a dumb, single-minded, sexualized person. I tried that myself and failed :) But if anyone could do it, then it's you! # 😘
10/18/19, 11:53 AM
neat 3some and the partnership aspect keeps up making it amorous and hot. fucking in the first boy. well if refuge in audacity is a thing use it for good
10/18/19, 11:50 AM
I want to know what's really embarrassing ? I didn't get the Tom and Jerry thing until like the next chapter when he pretty much points it out to us. Changes get a bit more positive for Parker . but you definitely set up and use the change in the guy going from self-conscious and slightly inconfident to dominate rich and sure in a pleasing way. this is even explain later how all of these changes while obviously to a certain benefit from the start include trying to factor in satisfying their Ambitions and or desires .
10/18/19, 11:44 AM
I'm embarrassed to say that I did not get it or what was going on with this chapter. It was really raised giving the audience and the format and said he actually write a kind of characterization as opposed to just set up obvious strawman. okay I guess technically he did that. But the real point is that I actually enjoyed reading this or more turning listen to an audiobook and listening and getting the field for the character and their ideas and the setup. It was simple but fun and I got a sense that there was a tease to the whole thing as well as plenty of characterization . however primarily this chapter is setup but with a good hint at the end I can't say that I liked it but it did make me want to read on and then I liked what was coming so over all this story is really fun and solid it's also feels in a way different . it's hard to say but it's like a style or circumstance I don't feel over exposed to . That's this isn't two people immediately fall in love so much as a couple enjoying wild circumstances together which makes things kind of fun . it's at the very least different from my normal expectation which I suppose tells us that yes focus groups and accepting feedback can in fact have positive outcomes for something that's a lot of the same but fresh different
10/18/19, 9:07 AM
Thanks, guys! Hehe. I've _been_ on a bit of a sci-fi kick lately and wanted to see where I could take this. I'm glad you enjoyed it!
malskin
10/18/19, 6:56 AM
with life i somehow missed this series but i have binged read it - rubbersome its really good. like how guys re being infected and the seed it growing. looking forward to read how the 2 cops are going to be recycled
Anonymous
10/18/19, 5:32 AM
I mean it's Chaoticdjinn. The midpoint is where they're compromised but satisfied, then the ending disturbs that satisfaction. Dollars to donuts it ends with Connor posturing and offhandedly wishing he could make it with a chick, he ends up straight and Taylor is left pining.
Anonymous
10/18/19, 4:04 AM
I'm intrigued.
10/18/19, 3:50 AM
PupScout Thank you for the praise. I hope the mental image of rubber electrified drones was better than the female bridal party.
10/18/19, 2:31 AM
I loved this chapter. Every aspect. I had to pee and I was hungry, but I couldn't get up, I just had to read on. As for your comment on haka. I used to love the haka, then I saw a bridal party do it at a wedding and I was completely done with it. Ruined forever.