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Sep 30, 2019
9/30/19, 2:31 PM
Great Story
9/30/19, 9:30 AM
Thanks! I was thinking the same thing, how there's not a lot of the kind of stories I'm looking for, which is why I guess I decided to just...write them myself? I haven't really written short stories...or like...stories period really. I read a lot of books but that's about it, the fact that people have responded as positively as they have honestly surprises me. I'm glad you guys like this!
Anonymous
9/30/19, 4:42 AM
I love your stories. I can't wait for the next one!
Anonymous
9/30/19, 4:01 AM
I need mooooooooore! You’re such a talented writer!
Anonymous
9/30/19, 3:51 AM
i love the story you created. It is exhilarating and entertaining at the same time with what a transformation the protagonist has gone through. I can't wait for what comes next. Will Godspark have his own counterpart? His opposite? Will a hero rise up? Personally, I'd love to introduce a character neither hero or villain. A chaotic neutral being that neither has anything to gain or lose in opposition to Godspark. Someone that just wants to amuse themselves, at the expense of the protagonist. I mean, his proclamation WAS an open challenge. Why shouldn't someone/something take him up on his offer?
Anonymous
9/30/19, 2:50 AM
I wonder if there are other people out of town that has chip in them... that would be hot !
Anonymous
9/30/19, 2:41 AM
It's such a great idea broadcasting heroes being humiliated,but i think it's missing a final touch--the defeated hero needs a collar around his neck to show the world his slave stats and ownership to his master.IMO,a slave without collar is incomplete and the most erotic part to me in the first chapter is the depiction of the enslaved heroes out in public naked with their collars on.it's so humiliating and i like it.and i could tell we both share the same fondness for collars,so honestly i'm kinda surprised with the lack of a collar.Anyway it's a great plot.cant wait to c what's cumming next.Hopefully,we could c the defeated hero get mind-wiped and going through some hard trainings.And i've got a suggestion..I read s story about superman being enslaved long time ago.,but what i like it the most is,in the end,the villain trained the mind-wiped superman to be a dog and thought of teaching his dog more tricks then said to his dog who's drinking his master's piss from its dog bowl on his hand and knees in its dog cage,"if only the citizens could c how humiliated you are".i admit that ever since then,enslaved heroes doing dog tricks for their masters in public with all the citizens watching has become the most erotic fantasy to me and i've been waiting for an author writing it.So...what do u think of the idea?I think centurion is a great candidate for he role:p
Butch Hafley
9/30/19, 1:48 AM
This one needs to continue.
9/30/19, 12:31 AM
It was pretty cool and a nice piece of poetic justice, although I've personally not beem too crazy about present-tense narrative style...but that's just me,
Anonymous
9/29/19, 11:41 PM
Power down mode is hot. I think it should be used to corrupt Uncle Butch, make him tell his nephew what he's really thinking when he's being defensive.