Recent Comments

Anonymous
9/29/19, 5:33 AM
brilliant as always. keep it coming!
9/29/19, 4:15 AM
This was the perfectly logical development of both character and plot. Narrative style was flawless, although I wasn't crazy about the costume design as described; But that was a minor nitpick in an otherwise fabulous chapter!!
Anonymous
9/29/19, 2:43 AM
Hell yeah! Great story!
Anonymous
9/29/19, 2:04 AM
The story needs a fair bit of editing as some of the tenses are out of whack and there are grammatical errors here and there. The concept is great but the bit where both boys are drained isn't really explained.
crashlander2002@yahoo.com
9/29/19, 12:26 AM
Hat, needs to be continued!
david
9/28/19, 6:09 PM
Hi, thanks so much for starting to develop this story. The premise and setting are great. i love hypnosis and mind control stories, and this promises to be a good one. i do agree with almost all the previous comments. The details of the seduction and continued control are hugely important to make a really hot story. Everyone has their own leanings when it comes to specific kinks, so do what you think best with that - whatever really turns you on. Personally for me straight to gay and permanent dumbing down aren't as arousing as other kinks. Anyway i am looking forward to reading more!
Anonymous
9/28/19, 5:40 PM
let me know when you're casting the movie!
Anonymous
9/28/19, 5:39 PM
another fan who really wants another chapter here!
Anonymous
9/28/19, 3:11 PM
rushed...slow it down a little
Sep 25, 2019
Anonymous
9/28/19, 1:42 PM
I really liked your story, like many others, I would like to continue it or make other similar ones ... The only thing that didn't convince me was that I think it could be longer and with more history and sex