Recent Comments

Anonymous
9/29/19, 2:04 AM
The story needs a fair bit of editing as some of the tenses are out of whack and there are grammatical errors here and there. The concept is great but the bit where both boys are drained isn't really explained.
crashlander2002@yahoo.com
9/29/19, 12:26 AM
Hat, needs to be continued!
david
9/28/19, 6:09 PM
Hi, thanks so much for starting to develop this story. The premise and setting are great. i love hypnosis and mind control stories, and this promises to be a good one. i do agree with almost all the previous comments. The details of the seduction and continued control are hugely important to make a really hot story. Everyone has their own leanings when it comes to specific kinks, so do what you think best with that - whatever really turns you on. Personally for me straight to gay and permanent dumbing down aren't as arousing as other kinks. Anyway i am looking forward to reading more!
Anonymous
9/28/19, 5:40 PM
let me know when you're casting the movie!
Anonymous
9/28/19, 5:39 PM
another fan who really wants another chapter here!
Anonymous
9/28/19, 3:11 PM
rushed...slow it down a little
Sep 25, 2019
Anonymous
9/28/19, 1:42 PM
I really liked your story, like many others, I would like to continue it or make other similar ones ... The only thing that didn't convince me was that I think it could be longer and with more history and sex
Demospam7@hotmail.nl
9/28/19, 1:20 PM
My god that was awesome!
Stellar
9/28/19, 1:07 PM
While the first and second were fun, the story seems kinda boring after awhile. Like, everyone is corrupted and those that are left are prisoners waiting to be corrupted. Something about the power dynamics in the story just feel off. Maybe the complete and total sweep that the takeover has been with practically no real resistance makes it sorta predictable and disappointing. If this gets finished and they do lure the Sun God I really do hope our author does something more interesting than "he also gets corrupted". I dunno, it just feels like the more satisfying ending at this point would be for the Sun God to come in and clean house.
Anonymous
9/28/19, 7:42 AM
The setting and basic idea is just what i love most. Details are important in this kind of narrative, especially when making it compelling and hot as f##k. My sweet spot is muscle growth; wish to see Professor create mindless, obedient athlete for coaches (losing individuality and focusing on game, training and sex). More than that I got interested in where you're ganna make this story go. Nice work!