Recent Comments

Willie Cici
9/13/19, 4:12 AM
Those who can, do. Those who can't, critique - anonymously, to boot. You did a good job with your story, the exposition and the plot line. Okay, so it could use a little polish. Spell and Grammar Check can't hurt. You'd be surprised how many errors it picks up. I used it routinely. Keep writing. If Hypnothrill mentors you, for sure, you will have a masterpiece on your hands.
Aug 19, 2018
The_Supernatural_D
9/13/19, 1:38 AM
Haven't read the second part yet, but just wanted to say that there's something about the way you use words that feels almost magical. Like you're weaving something out of silk.
Mdlftr
9/12/19, 10:52 PM
I too felt disgusted by Jersey's beating and humiliation. I also really disliked Guernsey's self-abasement and lack of self esteem when it came to the Bull. Since I believe that muscularly improving yourself should make you stronger in both your body and your own self esteem and personality, I'm disappointed to see the bully, aka "The Bull", prevail. His only redeeming characteristics seem to be his muscle growth powers and his overwhelming personality. The whole "I own you" theme was a major repudiation of self determination in this fantasy universe. Good writing, though!
Mdlftr
9/12/19, 10:34 PM
Absman publishes ANOTHER original concept story! I love that you are consistently able to come up with new and different muscle growth/masculinity scenarios! Anyone can do research, but you have a real knack for seeing the entertaining muscle growth potential in a situation! I'll admit that I think of "Harry Potter" and the Enchanted Forest now when I think of centaurs -- not huge, horse-cocked, sex-obsessed muscle men! Good writing - well up to your usual high standards!
9/12/19, 9:00 PM
This is the best story I've read on here. Please keep writing!
Anonymous
9/12/19, 7:43 PM
Lame. This story never peaked.
FAN
9/12/19, 7:36 PM
Best story I have read in years....BRAVO......... more please.....much more!!!!!!
Apr 19, 2010
Anonymous
9/12/19, 6:05 PM
I would gladly pay commission for its continuation.
Anonymous
9/12/19, 6:04 PM
I agree with the comments about 'Boypussy'. It is by far my most favorite piece of original writing ANYWHERE. I have gone back to it more times than is mentally healthy and would gladly pay commission for its continuation.
Apr 19, 2010
Anonymous
9/12/19, 5:59 PM
I wish with all my being that this would be made into a multiple chapter story. OR someone would take up the mantle (with the appropriate permission of course).