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staritman 1
9/12/19, 5:34 PM
absman420 and hypnohrill, thank you for the encouraging words I am working on another story and will then come back and write a sequel to this one. I appreciate the positivity.
9/12/19, 5:28 PM
> Great story! Shitty writing. > Okay, harsh. In fact, the exposition was a little clunky, but -- as hypnothrill mentioned -- once the hypnosis got underway, it was pretty hot. I mean, I got a hard on. I'm left with questions at the end, yes, but I definitely want more. Keep it up -- the best way to learn to write is by writing. You're doing fine.
9/12/19, 4:36 PM
> i have a story with a REALLY REALLY similar plot line i posted here some time ago featuring Priapus > What is it? I would love to read it. Interestingly, I was researching a Priapus story -- although one VERY different than this -- when I stumbled across Pholus. The more I read about him -- and the astronomical and astrological variations -- the more distracted I became. As much as I'd like to get back to my original story, I'm ready to write about something else...
9/12/19, 3:33 PM
I don't think it's a bad story at all. The beginning is a little rough, and it could use a bit more build-up to the hypnosis scene. But the hypnosis scene itself is written quite well. I hope you write a sequel, because I want to know what happens next!
staritman 1
9/12/19, 3:29 PM
Please note it was my first story, I will work on getting better
Anonymous
9/12/19, 3:27 PM
Great story! Shitty writing. Please learn to write AND edit.
Sep 11, 2019
Anonymous
9/12/19, 12:02 PM
thanks man, I love your beginning
Anonymous
9/12/19, 11:31 AM
This is exceptionally hot. I can't wait for part 2 if there is one. The slow transition into a musky man so delicious. My favorite fantasy.
Jfsc
9/12/19, 11:07 AM
Love, love, love this story! Great imagery and concept. I enjoyed the sci-fi component as well. MORE PLEASE!