Recent Comments

Anonymous
11/20/24, 4:15 PM
Hell yeah, you're back! I was reading through your stories just the other day, wishing for more! Christmas came early !

11/20/24, 4:39 PM
@Anonymous thanks so much!! I don't want to overcommit because, well, life happens, but I hope to be able to share more work soon!
11/20/24, 3:41 PM
Really love it, dominant bottom hypnotist is such a hot thing, it was a good idea, and amazing
11/20/24, 2:06 PM
I don't mind the order of events. Love the concept and would love to see it evolve. But as it stands, it's a beautiful piece on its own.
11/20/24, 2:05 PM
love it. keep going
U.K. g
10/29/24, 11:30 AM
For me, the looping back round similar themes adds to the cumulative impact of another very hot and intense chapter. There are though some duplicated paragraphs in places where the editing has gone slightly awry.

11/20/24, 1:19 PM
@U.K. g Yep, came here to say this. I loved the last chapter and I'm glad this one builds on it, but the repetition is pretty distracting. Even when the paragraphs aren't word-for-word repeats, there are a lot of paragraphs that say almost the same things as what was said one or two paragraphs ago, and that's distracting too. For example, there's a paragraph that starts with "The physical urges weren’t something to fight—they were part of the process, part of his transformation into something more." And then, two paragraphs later, we have "The urges that had once confused him were now clear—they were part of his role, part of the trust he had to build with his teammates." I'd rather get some new detail coming to CJ's mind prompted by the action of the scene, instead of rehashing the same realizations. This happens with Toby a lot too, kinda seems like he "realizes" that Holloway's shaping him into "something bigger" in every single scene, instead of reacting to new events with new thoughts. All that's to say, I think this story is really hot, has the potential to be even hotter with some deliberate editing, and I look forward to more!
Daniel
1/27/21, 1:23 PM
was hoping since the spell came from a dark, bitter place- for a bit more...corruption...? Nice use of color metaphors, sweet characters ( not a big fan of sweet ) I.J.S.

11/20/24, 12:00 PM
@[Daniel](/user/show/10004270) going to be returning to this series, and exploring darker themes. any specific suggestions?
Anonymous
11/20/24, 9:26 AM
incrivel
10/24/24, 2:29 PM
Would love to see what happens next

11/20/24, 9:13 AM
@[TheWalkingAlive](/user/show/925088) Thanks for reading! There's definitely more to cum! 😉
Anonymous
11/20/24, 8:50 AM
Any possibility of continuing stories with this ghost? Possibly with a new guy for him to play with haha
11/20/24, 8:22 AM
Hot! Excited to read more