Recent Comments

Anonymous
8/16/19, 7:58 PM
This ended just as it started to get good. I enjoyed but feels incomple ;)
Dario Brando
8/16/19, 7:54 PM
What the fuck where's my son
Anonymous
8/16/19, 5:36 PM
Okay now that you’ve described someone as looking like TOM HOLLAND, he needs a bigger and sexier role in the story.
8/16/19, 4:31 PM
At the guy who was worried about sounding douchey: Editorial? Who is that? Do you imagine there’s an army of Editors working behind the scenes on this site? Or that the site moderators want to be the ones to determine what the minimum quality bar is, and deal with all of the flack that goes with that? “You censored my story!” “How many other stories have you censored?” Are you volunteering to act as the quality reviewer? Are you volunteering to help new authors by editing their stories? If you are, great, and all power to you. This author has hidden their email, but you could probably contact them to assist them indirectly via Martin. If you aren’t offering to do any of that, please shut up. The author might be ESL and need help. They might be starting out and have never posted anything online. They might have never taken a writing course of any kind. Be kind, and instead of shitting all over everything, offer constructive, useful, actionable criticism. Links to articles on story structure and grammar would’ve been useful, telling them to make the story longer would have been useful, pointing them at the forums or the Discord group to get feedback and editing assistance would have all been useful and helpful.
8/16/19, 2:28 PM
Thanks guys. I'm glad I ran with it! :D
Senpai
8/16/19, 2:08 PM
Not bad. Also wolverine and sabertooth is the perfect target to test out his man powers. Hehehe... Also try not mixing two point of views since it will cause a bit of a confusion and try mixing it to one point of view but mixing the thoughts without complicating the writing and story. A suggestion for future targets. Why not have him wear the symbiote suit to amplify his pheromones even further just like purple man did and combine it with the serum while wearing the symbiote will have any targets infatuated are now permanent once they have his semen to the targets body. a whaff from them will be enough to make their knees weak. Captain America is also a good target. hehehe
Drehi
8/16/19, 1:20 PM
cant wait to see ShootUp!
Mutabear
8/16/19, 1:10 PM
Amazing story. I like an occasional dose of 'happy ending' on here.
Papa Werebear
8/16/19, 11:48 AM
I really like this story! Thank you! 🐻
Hunter_C_Wolf@Hotmail.Com
8/16/19, 11:17 AM
I need one of those crystals please, willing to pay triple that.