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Stroppy Author
8/13/19, 2:32 PM
mate! wonderful character development! EXCELLENT metaphors. I'm envious!
8/13/19, 2:19 PM
> I very much love humiliation & dialog like that > I was working to set up both the BULL's arrogance/ homophobia/ dominance and counter-balance it with Guernsey's low self-esteem. It's a starting place. We won't see the BULL again for a while -- he becomes more a "presence" in the next few chapters -- so I had to establish him early.
Anonymous
8/13/19, 1:27 PM
I know this is going to sound douchey, but --- just because someone posts a story doesn't mean it should go up on the site. Editorial control should allow the editor to make a qualitative assessment and determination. I know that opens up another door for Martin to deal with, but, quality control demands it. This story sucked. It should never have been posted. It's really that simple.
Anonymous
8/13/19, 12:45 PM
this is the first story I'm ever commenting on because it's one of the best I've ever read. I can't wait to read more.
Hunter_C_Wolf@Hotmail.Com
8/13/19, 11:26 AM
Interesting twist, I very much love humiliation & dialog like that very much.
Anonymous
8/13/19, 10:46 AM
Please continue if possible, it is truly one of the best story I've read in a while.
Anonymous
8/13/19, 8:54 AM
damn please make a part 2
Anonymous
8/13/19, 8:32 AM
Using a genie as a framing device would've worked better if our protagonist remembered the world before the wish and knew he got himself into this situation, I think.
Anonymous
8/13/19, 7:52 AM
Awesome!! Every intellectuals and nerds must become a jock to build a solid foundation of our society.
8/13/19, 7:28 AM
I'm sorry. Is this an attempt at a story? I don't consider this as a story at all. Everything happens too fast and it is jarring. You have Simon who hates demons. Coincidentally you have a demon that specifically targeted him. Not only that his resistance is so pathetic. Coincidence - 2 Mind Possession - 1 Demons + 1 Lazy Writing - 10