Recent Comments

Anonymous
8/13/19, 12:45 PM
this is the first story I'm ever commenting on because it's one of the best I've ever read. I can't wait to read more.
Hunter_C_Wolf@Hotmail.Com
8/13/19, 11:26 AM
Interesting twist, I very much love humiliation & dialog like that very much.
Anonymous
8/13/19, 10:46 AM
Please continue if possible, it is truly one of the best story I've read in a while.
Anonymous
8/13/19, 8:54 AM
damn please make a part 2
Anonymous
8/13/19, 8:32 AM
Using a genie as a framing device would've worked better if our protagonist remembered the world before the wish and knew he got himself into this situation, I think.
Anonymous
8/13/19, 7:52 AM
Awesome!! Every intellectuals and nerds must become a jock to build a solid foundation of our society.
8/13/19, 7:28 AM
I'm sorry. Is this an attempt at a story? I don't consider this as a story at all. Everything happens too fast and it is jarring. You have Simon who hates demons. Coincidentally you have a demon that specifically targeted him. Not only that his resistance is so pathetic. Coincidence - 2 Mind Possession - 1 Demons + 1 Lazy Writing - 10
zefrog3@Yahoo.com
8/13/19, 7:28 AM
i like the idea but it need more flesh on the bones.
Nice but too quick
8/13/19, 7:01 AM
Everything happens too quick. I wish to see more struggle, the slower changes in emotion etc.
8/13/19, 6:27 AM
Hi Wesley, I've been a fan of you and of your writing for a while now. Long enough that I know that this certainly isn't the first (or second... or third) of your stories to receive backlash here or on the NCMC. So I have three things to say: 1. You have an immense talent. Don't let anonymous commenters convince you otherwise. 2. You are terrifically brave. You aren't afraid to write gross or ugly or awful - and this loses you some fans, but it wins you others. The bleakness of your writing is very raw, very real, and very compelling. 3. You have written a masterpiece here. This story is a punch in the gut. It's a rejection of the birdcage that we find ourselves trapped in during our lives. It's a rejection of the world we live in today - and it's also a hope for a better tomorrow. I hope you and your husband are in a better place, and I hope you'll be able to find a happier ending for your story too. Best wishes.