Recent Comments

8/12/19, 10:28 PM
TNT a volunteer?
Anonymous
8/12/19, 9:58 PM
😢
Anonymous
8/12/19, 9:45 PM
Was your house on fire while you were writing this? What was the need to speed through the time from the sip of the drink to until the slave awoke and was aware of his surroundings?
8/12/19, 9:37 PM
By the way, did ANYONE get my Dr. Woodrue joke?
8/12/19, 9:36 PM
> I was predicting that the muscle men would end up being harvested by the alien plant species, with the retreat operating as a front. > Honestly, after all the evil overtones of PTS, I just wanted to write a happy story where someone "defeats" the plant. But even I read this and think at the end, "The plants ARE winning...."
Anonymous
8/12/19, 9:31 PM
Nice change for a story like this to both be hot and not make me feel bad about what's happening to them. I was afraid this was going to turn into another story about these two fighting the changes and losing, and losing themselves in the process. It is such a nice change of pace that the changes, while not asked for, are all improvements that they seem to welcome. Keep it coming!
The Author
8/12/19, 9:11 PM
This story was an experiment and I completely agree that a longer length would have been 'too much'. Someone posted that they would like to see a story from a tops POV rather than the more common bottom-focus. I pondered this and then started thinking about minimalism and how many of my stories, as do others, go in to way more detail than they should, taking too much imagination away from the reader. So I decided to leave most of it up to the reader, including the dialog! Sort of like the Peanuts comic strips and movies where you never hear what the adults say. I also wanted the Oh Henry! twist and thought of an interrogation, so even like it seems as if is going there, it is not at all a snuff story. Hypnosis gave the perfect way for the top to implant the whole notion of a death to be investigated, but we all know the detective wanted it. Thanks for the comments.
8/12/19, 9:00 PM
Absman420, I do have an idea of where I would take the story. But I wouldn't want proceed without first giving you a rough outline of the story. I'm still formulating it in my head, but I basically have three plot points that would start the new series. I was wondering if I could send you an email, but don't have your address. If you could possibly contact me at: jacketrat@hotmail.com
Boston Satyr
8/12/19, 8:53 PM
An awesome vignette. Absman420 usually has a dark element behind his stories, i.e. good does not always triumph, but we're going to have fun along the way. This was sweet and satisfying in comparison; I was predicting that the muscle men would end up being harvested by the alien plant species, with the retreat operating as a front. Bravo!!
nerdysuitedbaby
8/12/19, 8:51 PM
Awe how sad. Although it was good I thought one world be turned into a women in the end like how the begin did with Michael and Chris before turning into Michelle and Christine glad it didn't go that route. Don't mind the happy ending or a sad ending just wish their true selves would have surfaced just once and see more how he controlled them. would have been more heart breaking and sad but still. Sorry you had to relive that through your writing but appreciate it all the same. I hope you're story has a happier ending then Steve and Kevin but in a way Kevin at least has the feelings he had both a blessing and a curse feel for Steve as he doesn't remember anything real. If anything Kevin fighting for his son would have been great. Hopefully you find your true happiness. I do hope to see these 2 again and possibly a bit brighter days.