Recent Comments

Anonymous
8/12/19, 9:31 PM
Nice change for a story like this to both be hot and not make me feel bad about what's happening to them. I was afraid this was going to turn into another story about these two fighting the changes and losing, and losing themselves in the process. It is such a nice change of pace that the changes, while not asked for, are all improvements that they seem to welcome. Keep it coming!
The Author
8/12/19, 9:11 PM
This story was an experiment and I completely agree that a longer length would have been 'too much'. Someone posted that they would like to see a story from a tops POV rather than the more common bottom-focus. I pondered this and then started thinking about minimalism and how many of my stories, as do others, go in to way more detail than they should, taking too much imagination away from the reader. So I decided to leave most of it up to the reader, including the dialog! Sort of like the Peanuts comic strips and movies where you never hear what the adults say. I also wanted the Oh Henry! twist and thought of an interrogation, so even like it seems as if is going there, it is not at all a snuff story. Hypnosis gave the perfect way for the top to implant the whole notion of a death to be investigated, but we all know the detective wanted it. Thanks for the comments.
8/12/19, 9:00 PM
Absman420, I do have an idea of where I would take the story. But I wouldn't want proceed without first giving you a rough outline of the story. I'm still formulating it in my head, but I basically have three plot points that would start the new series. I was wondering if I could send you an email, but don't have your address. If you could possibly contact me at: jacketrat@hotmail.com
Boston Satyr
8/12/19, 8:53 PM
An awesome vignette. Absman420 usually has a dark element behind his stories, i.e. good does not always triumph, but we're going to have fun along the way. This was sweet and satisfying in comparison; I was predicting that the muscle men would end up being harvested by the alien plant species, with the retreat operating as a front. Bravo!!
nerdysuitedbaby
8/12/19, 8:51 PM
Awe how sad. Although it was good I thought one world be turned into a women in the end like how the begin did with Michael and Chris before turning into Michelle and Christine glad it didn't go that route. Don't mind the happy ending or a sad ending just wish their true selves would have surfaced just once and see more how he controlled them. would have been more heart breaking and sad but still. Sorry you had to relive that through your writing but appreciate it all the same. I hope you're story has a happier ending then Steve and Kevin but in a way Kevin at least has the feelings he had both a blessing and a curse feel for Steve as he doesn't remember anything real. If anything Kevin fighting for his son would have been great. Hopefully you find your true happiness. I do hope to see these 2 again and possibly a bit brighter days.
LongtimeFan
8/12/19, 8:22 PM
Oh, what an ending...as you say, it is hopeful, not happy. I like to believe that Michael makes it out. I think he will. :) It's especially satisfying because Mayor Derry conjured those kids from the energy he sucked from his victims, so he'd presumably want them straight--and yet...And it is interesting that the mayor, for all of his inhuman power, STILL can't completely break the very depths of a person's sexuality, whether it's Steven still having sex with his "daddy" or Kevin longing to love again. That is the hope I see in this story--that all the hatred, all the self-loathing, all the judgment, the very depths of cruelty, cannot change *who we are.* Also, Wesley, you are so brave to share your story with us, and you and your husband are both incredibly strong for surviving in such a horrible environment. That you shared this incredible, heartrending story with us, channeling pure pain into helping others...there is beauty in that. In the words of Maya Angelou: "But still, like dust... WE RISE."
Anonymous
8/12/19, 7:13 PM
It's very well written, I especially enjoy the trickery part. The only thing that doesn't really follow is Trent having sex with his little brother. I could see his little brother possibly being gay and Trent being the homophobe that he is bullying him, but sex with him? That and wouldn't his body have lost its "no homo" status long ago if he had indeed been having sex with his brother?
8/12/19, 7:00 PM
I quite like the core story of the narrator's transformation into a boi, and I like the world building you're doing here (with the whole alternate history of boi harems). I'm just not sure that you need the whole framing device with the genie.
Phxforce
8/12/19, 6:36 PM
so i have a question how did he even control these guys? i know you sorta explained it in previous chapters. still i would love a chapter on how he did it especially when they were seemingly hard for no reason. anyhow i love the personal story that went into this. thank you as i have personally been trapped in that kind of place before. amazing story amazing premise!!!
8/12/19, 6:14 PM
The story as is is hot though when I think how it made all actual gay people into bois I'm not a fan. But him becoming a boi is sexy.