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8/8/19, 2:26 PM
That was hot, and interesting way to tell the story (as a big text message to Raul).
8/8/19, 10:43 AM
Thank you! I largely aped the structure that Max Mann used -- although I added a secondary character, where he would usually focus on the familial relationship. I'm neither here nor there with incestual characters but since I was playing in Max Mann's playground, I followed his lead. (I can't imagine saying a line like "impregnate me like you did mom" -- even as I read it again after so many years, that line jumped out at me -- that's SOOOOOO Max Mann.) Glad you enjoyed it!
Anonymous
8/8/19, 8:12 AM
Hope this story continues. Would be nice to see a really slow evolution happening. Also perhaps cool to read how Leo's thoughts 'persuade' him to be more ballsy and what his thoughts and views are during the slow transformation. Pretty hot.
8/8/19, 6:43 AM
@Wesley Bracken - Yes! I'm so glad someone other than me hates that trope. it puts the blame of homophobia on gay men by presuming all homophobes are just self- hating. it's a way for straight people to ignore their own homophobia and the role society plays in maintaining it (and doesn't make any sense mathematically). Worse, it's frigging everywhere. That being says, tropes are just tools, and you use it really well here. it would probably go out on a second draft, but i could easily see the sheriff as bi, or straight but feeling like any close relationship with a guy is "gay" and going to "taint" him. There's definitely something to be said for how homophobia gets in the way of guys forming close friendships.
8/8/19, 6:17 AM
@BlindSeer0 - Honestly, I had more ideas planned for Christine and Michelle in this story, but as it developed, those ideas got sidelined. They have an important part in this, and when I revisit this at some point to construct a second draft, I hope to give them both fuller roles. Trust me, if anyone on here in interested in screeds, it's me. The ages were a little weird in this, I admit, and it's not clear what's happening when or where. But giving too much detail would spoil the surprise I suppose. As for the pulled punch, you mention it here. I hate the trope that "guy is homophobic because they are gay themselves," and when I started this story, I resolved to avoid it as best I could, but it resolved the sheriff's conflict here in the quickest, neatest, and in some ways most satisfying fashion, so I used it. Initially, I wanted the sheriff caught in some odd liminal space, not so much straight or gay as simply overwhelmingly dominant and sexually fascistic towards everyone, but the story was moving in a different direction, and I let it go where it needed to go. It still works, certainly, and has plenty of impact, but it reduces some of the sheriff's complexity that I wanted to build on.
Anonymous
8/8/19, 5:30 AM
hot
8/8/19, 3:30 AM
This is shaping up to be a good pup story. And I love a good pup story. Looking forward to reading on.
Dio brando
8/8/19, 2:53 AM
Ew.
Anonymous
8/8/19, 2:36 AM
I wonder if there was a follow-up. Would be hot!!!!
Anonymous
8/8/19, 2:19 AM
Cool story!! Keep it coming!!!