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7/3/19, 4:03 PM
Hypnothrill— Understood that you didn't want to build another world, and I got the idea behind the plant. I think if, perhaps, you maybe had a single line by a Lord, like, "Another one has come" or "escaped" or something, it would have helped me make that separation/difference clearer that you have two adjacent, very separate/different societies. (And there are lots of analogies from literature that use this, or even comparison works -- e.g., it's like they escaped from "1984" and went into "Brave New World" (from overseers to drugs).)
Anonymous
7/3/19, 4:00 PM
Nothing like a hard man in a trance
7/3/19, 3:15 PM
This is super hot! Are you going to finish the story? I’d love to read more.
7/3/19, 2:54 PM
Astrolub, that's a fair critique. I wanted a fairly quick transformation because that's how I envisioned the mind control working in this very different society that Alvo and Joris end up in; it's kind of my take on the "lotus eaters" episode in The Odyssey, where the flowers that Joris is chewing totally wipe your mind, leaving behind only a happy slaveboy. But you're right--that society is only sketched out in a couple of sentences. I didn't want to do a whole new round of world building; I just wanted to leave the reader with the impression that this was another MC-heavy gay dystopia, which ran on different (less communistic) principles than Phallopolis.
Unheilig43@gmail.com
7/3/19, 12:22 PM
Great story. Probably the best I've read here so far. Will you be continuing this? I certainly hope so. Thank you.
Apr 27, 2018
lloyd311@aol.com
7/3/19, 11:24 AM
Just read this again for the first time in a while, and damn - it is still so great! Hope to see more from you soon... LLOYD
SirD
7/3/19, 10:29 AM
love this series please keep em coming.
ForgottenCradle
7/3/19, 8:58 AM
I need to agree that the last part seemed short and a bit rushed,but the ending made sense. Alvo's decision,as hard as it was,is probably the best. When you cant return you need to keep walking. Not being able to return and having to look back on the past daily is more hurtful
7/3/19, 6:41 AM
I liked the story, but honestly, this last part seemed a bit of a let-down. It seemed too hasty. Your setting in the first two parts were well explained and made sense and let me visualize them. The characterization made sense. The decision in this part made sense. But then just a few paragraphs of how he goes from someone independent to a mindless sex slave for unknown "Lords" (I thought maybe Leaders -- so it wasn't really a choice he made, he could never really leave?) just seemed too abrupt and left questions, rather than resolving the trilogy.
Yorksbiker
7/3/19, 5:15 AM
Great work. Not into scallys myself but I loved how the writing showed the conflict in his mind and him become weaker as the scally took over. Look forward to reading more of your stories.