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7/3/19, 4:22 PM
They say the sign of great work is when it creates an emotion in the reader - and well, this chapter has filled me with anger. I really can't stand the ending and the nature of things. Is very frustrating and in part annoying. The whole addition of another society just has me rolling my eyes at it. Especially since we saw a person arriving and they seemed normal. So yeah, absolutely not a fan of the direction this story took. By the way there were many ways you could have kept the ending ambiguous. A perfect example is how in the Giver you don't know if the lad survives or what sort of world he has entered. This one is just sad.
Daddy 🍆
7/3/19, 4:17 PM
Please! Make another chapter to this! Don't stop writing!
ForgottenCradle
7/3/19, 4:06 PM
damn! I binged the change and mr.red in 2 days! and I love your universe. the lore.the premise. I can only recommend this to everyone and I hope for much more
7/3/19, 4:03 PM
Hypnothrill— Understood that you didn't want to build another world, and I got the idea behind the plant. I think if, perhaps, you maybe had a single line by a Lord, like, "Another one has come" or "escaped" or something, it would have helped me make that separation/difference clearer that you have two adjacent, very separate/different societies. (And there are lots of analogies from literature that use this, or even comparison works -- e.g., it's like they escaped from "1984" and went into "Brave New World" (from overseers to drugs).)
Anonymous
7/3/19, 4:00 PM
Nothing like a hard man in a trance
7/3/19, 3:15 PM
This is super hot! Are you going to finish the story? I’d love to read more.
7/3/19, 2:54 PM
Astrolub, that's a fair critique. I wanted a fairly quick transformation because that's how I envisioned the mind control working in this very different society that Alvo and Joris end up in; it's kind of my take on the "lotus eaters" episode in The Odyssey, where the flowers that Joris is chewing totally wipe your mind, leaving behind only a happy slaveboy. But you're right--that society is only sketched out in a couple of sentences. I didn't want to do a whole new round of world building; I just wanted to leave the reader with the impression that this was another MC-heavy gay dystopia, which ran on different (less communistic) principles than Phallopolis.
Unheilig43@gmail.com
7/3/19, 12:22 PM
Great story. Probably the best I've read here so far. Will you be continuing this? I certainly hope so. Thank you.
Apr 27, 2018
lloyd311@aol.com
7/3/19, 11:24 AM
Just read this again for the first time in a while, and damn - it is still so great! Hope to see more from you soon... LLOYD
SirD
7/3/19, 10:29 AM
love this series please keep em coming.