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Anonymous
6/27/19, 1:17 PM
nice start , can't wait for more!
6/27/19, 12:52 PM
Wow, thanks for the positive feedback, guys! Heru Kane, all your questions will be answered in the next chapter. LongtimeFan, I never explicitly address this within the story, but I would say that they reduce men to workhorses simply because there's so much hard physical labor that needs to be done to sustain the community. The whole all-male clan system and the having sex with other men is a way to keep the population satisfied while boosting social cohesion; notice how little jealousy or possessiveness or competitiveness we see. And even the loss of memory helps to promote that cohesive identity and positive attitude; it spares them from the feelings of melancholy and loss that Alvo's currently experiencing. The way I imagine it, this system's been going on for generations, and so the current Leaders didn't invent it; they're just the ones who are helping to sustain it (and it's built for maximum sustainability, since it privileges community harmony over individual ambition).
Anonymous
6/27/19, 12:19 PM
More please. :)
transformheaven
6/27/19, 11:51 AM
More more more :3
Anonymous
6/27/19, 11:38 AM
Great start, excited to read more!
Anonymous
6/27/19, 11:32 AM
This is a really solid chapter. Keep it up!
LongtimeFan
6/27/19, 11:06 AM
A beautiful chapter! The reveal that this society isn't some far-flung future, but one existing alongside a world like our own, gives the story even greater power. The Leaders being generally decent men who genuinely believe that things like independent thought and personal freedom lead to distress is a nice twist, too--most cult stories frame the ruler as megalomaniacal monsters out to destroy free will for evil. I'm also curious as to WHY the leaders do this...what's the point of the society? Why reduce men to workhorses with the memories of goldfish and the desire to have sex with other men? What goal could that achieve? And now that Alvo has seen the light, can he go back to the cave? Only you could write a story that provokes the mind AND body this well, Hypnothrill. Phenomenal--just phenomenal. :)
Anonymous
6/27/19, 9:38 AM
Awesome story! I think it would also be good to read from an outsider's perspective, who just witnessed Chad's changes.
Anonymous
6/27/19, 7:59 AM
Excellent work
degoetz@yahoo.com
6/27/19, 7:49 AM
Fucking hot! How about an extremely hairy bear bro