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6/18/19, 4:38 PM
Great story! I hope there is much more to come!
6/18/19, 4:36 PM
@Tommi95 — I see your point, and it's definitely a valid one. But the dumbing down aspect is specifically what makes it fun for me. :P.
Tommi95
6/18/19, 4:09 PM
When I am jerking off this story is great, after I have come I feel terrible. I mean Jackey is no longer a human being. He is just an obedient dog unable to ask himself questions. It's not a life. The only thing he can feel is "I want my daddy do protect me, so I'll do whatever he tells me", "I just wanna suck his cock and drink his piss". But where is his humanity? I mean when you say "his mind gone, no traces of Daniel" it makes me feel as though this teen has been murdered and reduced to a comatose, complying state. This means of course that Daddy is a monster that does not care about Danny in the least, since he has destroyed his personality just to get a fuck toy. I get it's just an erotic story but it would be nice to see a person that willingly embraces his submissive side and finds a Master that does not consider him an inferior being at all, but simply a lover who has a submissive side. But the love, the mutual respect and the consentment should be there. And it would be nice to see the sub actually succeeding in his life and fulfilling all his ambitions. At least that's how I see a healthy bdsm relationship. This one is hot while jerking off but if I actually think about it, it's a series of crimes against human rights that has nothing to do with love.
Anonymous
6/18/19, 4:02 PM
The story could of ending with the new Mal realizing what had happened to him. The new George laughing it off. Then the new Mal arriving at court for his hearing and seeing the new George's behavior, like his old self. Then the new Ma having to do jail time. A twist of fate.
Tommi95
6/18/19, 3:53 PM
Yeah I am with David on this. I mean it's cool to see him become a submissive but I don't get why he has to lose his mental abilities. I get when it's a temporary thing during sex, but I don't get why it has to permanent. Doesn't Daddy love Daniel? Wouldn't he want him to be able to interact with him like a lover? Besides to me compromising a person's mental capabilities and personality is pretty much like murder. On one side I find it hot because Danny has no control, on the other side I just feel too bad for him.
Anonymous
6/18/19, 3:30 PM
If your intent is to write an introductory story, this is an excellent start. Now you can add the why, Who sent it, What he can do with it and so on but agreed; TO instead of TOO, HEARDED instead of HEARD are all distractions you don't need. Martin can guide you to spell check. My own stories lack in the same area and this is the same feedback I received so it's not exclusive to you. I hope there's a second and third.
Bibimbap
6/18/19, 2:46 PM
What a story! I like it, the debasing and dumbing down are very hot and well written (although I must say I feel bad for poor Mikey). I hope you post chapter 2 soon!
Anonymous
6/18/19, 1:51 PM
GREAT START! You're a creative writer, hope the story continues.
Tommi95
6/18/19, 12:28 PM
Nice story, I actually really enjoyed it. I just don't get why every sissy has to become shallow and dull. This man was actually a clever man, why does he have to lose his capabilities in maths etc etc? I mean a guy can be a Nobel Prize winner and still enjoy being a sissy slut, the 2 things are not mutually exclusive.
Anonymous
6/18/19, 11:53 AM
amazing start