Recent Comments

Anonymous
6/11/19, 1:01 PM
Really great story! I would even like to read an extended version with a bit more character build up. I know you've gotta grab readers' attention pretty quickly, and I think the pacing is really good. As a personal preference, I'd like to see the twins show their true character a little bit before their "punishment" but that's just me ;-) Excellent story again, kept me hard the whole time.
Nov 16, 2005
6/11/19, 11:40 AM
Always loved this story, keep coming back to re-read it! Would love some more work from you if you're still writing.
6/11/19, 11:23 AM
I agree that Zak needs to be taught a lesson of who was in charge there. But leaving someone on the verge of being a potato and losing every turn is disheartening. I'd like to give him a fighting chance to gain his smarts again. No one deserves a complete personality murder.
Anonymous
6/11/19, 9:40 AM
Gruff and Sam sound nice
Anonymous
6/11/19, 8:05 AM
One of my new favs! Hit a lot of buttons. Keep it up dude!
6/11/19, 6:56 AM
Karma bited really hard here. I'm a twin myself and both of us are opposites like fire and water, light and dark yet like yin and yang.
6/11/19, 5:58 AM
Awesome story! I hope Jared can change other men as well!
Anonymous
6/11/19, 4:46 AM
Great story!! Loved it!!!!
Elm
6/11/19, 3:52 AM
As always, such a good story! I like Gruff more and more now. Thank you for writing this!
Anonymous
6/11/19, 3:50 AM
part 10 please!