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Anonymous
6/1/19, 1:27 PM
more please!
Anonymous
6/1/19, 1:21 PM
I loved it! cant wait to see mote of Gruff haha
6/1/19, 11:35 AM
Hahahaha! Welcome to the LEGION OF SUPER-HEROES! You've stumbled on the reason it's a cult book -- the main cast alone numbers over two-dozen. And that doesn't get into the secondary heroes (the Legion Academy, The Wanderers, The Substitutes), the villains, and the minor bit characters. I'm sure it's easier with a visual analog, but I've done the best I can to individualize them -- you know how I love a large cast. (Maybe I'll "borrow" a technique from Willie Cici and post a picture link in each chapter?) You've only met the boys (so far) -- wait'll I bring the girls back in chapter 8. Then I blow it all up soon after that and retcon the whole thing -- by then you won't know what the fuck is going on! Hahahahaha! <--- evil villain laugh I knew when I considered writing this that it wasn't going to be everybody's cup of tea -- choosing the LEGION alone guarantees that -- so I decided to write it to please myself and if others enjoyed it, great! I appreciate your level of trust in reading something as long and as weird as this and hanging with it -- I do have a plan. And if you stick with me till the end, you won't be sorry -- especially if you know how much I love satire! Thank you @hypnothrill, for your comments and your support. I shame myself that I read as much as I do on here and comment so little. You're one of my favorites. (And I'm not just saying that to get good reviews!)
Anonymous
6/1/19, 11:01 AM
more, please!!
6/1/19, 8:33 AM
@Touchstone No don't leave us. You're one of the best writer here
Anonymous
6/1/19, 7:56 AM
Wow, love it! Please write more.
6/1/19, 7:25 AM
I'm really loving the slow mental changes in this chapter, and Val-Or's change of attitude particularly turns me on. But the main problem I've been having with this story is that I just can't keep all the characters straight. I've never read the Legion of Super Heroes comics, so I don't have a clear mental picture of the characters the Horde are based on. And so most of them end up seeming really similar to me; it wasn't until they both showed up in the same scene that I realized that "Energy Boy" and "Electric Lad" were separate characters.
Evan
6/1/19, 6:39 AM
This was really well done. Congratulations on a great story. It had great detail, pacing and the gradual decline into being under control is awesome.
Jul 12, 2014
david
6/1/19, 6:09 AM
Enthralling detail about the devolving final surrender of a new slave. i loved the hazy feeling of the boy's loss of self.
david
6/1/19, 5:24 AM
Great story! You included so many layers to Nathan's subterfuge and the personal perspectives of the characters. The story was incredibly rich in plot and character. i love the way you include so much very real sounding hypnosis script. Thanks so much! Do you have any hypnosis audio or video recordings, or even text scripts available anywhere? Would love to try some.