Recent Comments

Anonymous
5/24/19, 4:12 AM
Good first story! Good content and well-written. Welcome aboard!!!!
Anonymous
5/24/19, 4:00 AM
The premise and the idea are great. I kept reading the story --- despite the shitty writing style. Sheesh! Run the GrammarCheck. It takes two minutes. You would realize how many errors you committed. For your first effort, you did well with the idea. Edit and polish. You'll do fine for the next.
Anonymous
5/24/19, 3:59 AM
Like the idea that the hynotist is a bottom. Just because he wants to be submissive in bed doesn't mean he should be passive about getting what he wants.
Randmperson2
5/24/19, 3:12 AM
Agreed! I really enjoyed this one and I'm looking forward to future stories from you! Keep it up!
5/24/19, 2:49 AM
At the beginning I thought this was going to be a different character telling the same story as Officer O'Connor. But oh, we had jocks and coaches, with a firehouse as transformation central. Who could ask for more? And the gradual transformation as he wrote in his diary was great. And ending at firehouse transformation central to become a true Musclehead. Perfect!
Anonymous
5/24/19, 12:41 AM
Great debut! Always love a good mental descent. :)
Anonymous
5/23/19, 11:28 PM
maybe you could make a vore universe that would be hot as the devil
tomozco
5/23/19, 11:06 PM
This is getting even more exciting!
matt
5/23/19, 7:32 PM
for a first effort extremely well written, great idea and execution.
Anonymous
5/23/19, 12:26 PM
I agree with dems, wish it was him who topped the daddy. oh well, it's still good though.