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Anonymous
5/18/19, 9:08 PM
Excellent
topaz172@aol.com
5/18/19, 7:22 PM
@Pup... I get it that having split them up you had to go with one... always a tough choice ... How I look at it, it would be narratively more important to 'show' the evolution from victim to super-zombie, particularly as super-zombies are also a new factor in the story.. I'd do that *'first'* as it heightens the threat to your second protagonist. Although not published yet, I have a chapter to my current story that follows a different character.. specifically so he gets a bad end and highlights a future threat to main characters.
5/18/19, 6:59 PM
at topaz, i definitely agree that his transformation is rather quick. It felt quick when i wrote it but i felt that it rich's transformation wasnt the main focus of this story so i let it slide. thank you for the constructive feedback. stuff like this allows me to improve as i work.
Anonymous
5/18/19, 3:49 PM
Awesome!!! Interesting follow-up to the original.
topaz172@aol.com
5/18/19, 1:12 PM
For me Rich's transition from toe licking to fully aware Zombie-master felt a little quick and would have been hot if expanded upon... suggest you write a flashback of him recalling that 'character growth' and possibly more about the nature of the contaminant. Hopefully you take this as constructive comment as you've constructed a compelling hot story.
Anonymous
5/18/19, 12:46 PM
Thank you for including a character who uses singular they. it's so rare in this genre.
Evan
5/18/19, 12:34 PM
Awesome conclusion to the first part. The beta bitch transformation sequence was particularly good for me. Look forward to more and seeing what other tricks they have up their sleeves. And the new beta responding.
Anonymous
5/18/19, 12:14 PM
Great job, can't wait to see where it goes next.
Anonymous
5/18/19, 11:47 AM
another great part to this growing story
Dodger
5/18/19, 10:47 AM
I had always hoped for an update to this one.