Recent Comments

firesix
5/13/19, 9:15 PM
Wow. Super interesting, and hot too. Keep writing! Would love to get to know more about this world you've created!
Anonymous
5/13/19, 8:41 PM
Terrific
May 13, 2019
5/13/19, 7:47 PM
interesting start, and great world-building! I can't wait to see Matthew experimenting with his harem of jocks
May 12, 2019
Anonymous
5/13/19, 4:31 PM
Bad form. Spelling, syntax and usage out of sync. As for substance, I liked. I agree with Hynominion. You need a slower burn to the story. It went by so fast that I didn't have time to get hard. It was "B'. Keep writing Just remember. The editing is the hard part.
5/13/19, 4:31 PM
Honestly, I'm kind of just glad to get confirmation that some of your previous stories were intended to be horror/ deconstructions. As for this one, the fact that the program is explicitly called out as a dystopia is interesting (i obviously agree that it is). This one we get Jackson's point of view and he willing joined coach. To him the loss of individuality and personal identity is worth it because being gay in a hyper masculine arena meant that he was personally afraid to reach out to people and be himself. i think some people are missing the "blind patriotism is bad" message that's going on here, especially with regards to the military and football, but once again i could just be imagining it... personally i hope someone takes the system down, but i don't have much hope of that happening. so I'll just enjoy the ride until then.
May 13, 2019
Martin
5/13/19, 4:28 PM
Perfect writing, great attitude and very hot! Love it!
May 13, 2019
Rick
5/13/19, 4:15 PM
I second the request to see the aftermath, as Matthew takes his place in charge, maybe even getting used to the level of control he has over his jock pack and demanding it from others.
May 13, 2019
Anonymous
5/13/19, 4:03 PM
yes please continue
Anonymous
5/13/19, 3:58 PM
when can we expect a new chapter?
Anonymous
5/13/19, 3:51 PM
i liked it lol