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Anonymous
5/13/19, 11:04 PM
Excellent work
topaz172@aol.com
5/13/19, 10:47 PM
Hi Timet Bears...? in the wood? ... not written it yet, but as one of the core archetypes its on the list (even if hair isn't my personal pref)
Timet
5/13/19, 10:41 PM
certainly a fascinating start. Can't wait for the next chapter... maybe bears in the future?
topaz172@aol.com
5/13/19, 9:51 PM
Firesix and Absman420 thanks for you're support. (please use the rating buttons so that this one pops back later as a best of...) I will find someplace in the forum to post the universe rules... so you can take the rules as a taster of the four chapters already written.
5/13/19, 9:32 PM
So glad to see a new series coming from you! Very excited!!!!!
firesix
5/13/19, 9:15 PM
Wow. Super interesting, and hot too. Keep writing! Would love to get to know more about this world you've created!
Anonymous
5/13/19, 8:41 PM
Terrific
May 13, 2019
5/13/19, 7:47 PM
interesting start, and great world-building! I can't wait to see Matthew experimenting with his harem of jocks
May 12, 2019
Anonymous
5/13/19, 4:31 PM
Bad form. Spelling, syntax and usage out of sync. As for substance, I liked. I agree with Hynominion. You need a slower burn to the story. It went by so fast that I didn't have time to get hard. It was "B'. Keep writing Just remember. The editing is the hard part.
5/13/19, 4:31 PM
Honestly, I'm kind of just glad to get confirmation that some of your previous stories were intended to be horror/ deconstructions. As for this one, the fact that the program is explicitly called out as a dystopia is interesting (i obviously agree that it is). This one we get Jackson's point of view and he willing joined coach. To him the loss of individuality and personal identity is worth it because being gay in a hyper masculine arena meant that he was personally afraid to reach out to people and be himself. i think some people are missing the "blind patriotism is bad" message that's going on here, especially with regards to the military and football, but once again i could just be imagining it... personally i hope someone takes the system down, but i don't have much hope of that happening. so I'll just enjoy the ride until then.