The game seems to favor a certain daddy-and-sons template. Does the game have an agenda, or just a fetish?

slow so far

I like a big cock on a fg. A lot of these snowflakes just can't handle a little playful aggression but I think it's really what makes them probably cream their jeans for your stories and keep reading. It would have been hot to at least see the newfound twink cunted before being pushed aside. I did like that he left him hard and begging before rejection though.

I'm kinda surprised to see the amount of backlash this story gets, and more importantly the way it's brought. This morning when I read the story there were multiple tags, a large part of this were this evening replaced by "bad". How can one be so childish? The fact that you don't like it doesn't mean you just have to change the tags. There are other stories on this site where a guy lusted after someone before their eighteenth birthday and mentioned the wait, so I don't really get why that would be a very big problem, as long as the sex happens after 18 (besides the fact that it can't be your cup of tea of course). The tone however that's used in most of the above comments is horrible, yes of course it is good to express your feelings about a story, but what do we want? Do we want someone to actually learn something from our comments and become a better writer, or do you just want to burn him down to the ground? At least try to make your feedback a bit constructive instead of asking Martin to take a story off the site or adding a "bad" tag. Let this be a place for people to grow (in more ways than one sometimes hehe ;) ) Now Esper, some of my feedback. I might not be the best writer myself, but I hope you can learn a bit from it. And of course it's just my personal taste ;) First of all, I really like the pace you had in this story, I think the balance between background and action is pretty good. I agree with Rubberchaps point tho that the developments between Damian's tenth and eighteenth birthday are a bit weird and act as an unpleasant pause in your storytelling. Indeed you could have used that space to tell a bit more about the stepfather's background or about that other guy you talked about. Talking about the other guy, I personally really like the fact that you bring him up but leave it a bit unclear so we can find that out later. I can see though why other people would want to see that a bit earlier in the story, that's one of those choices that you as a writer have to make of course. Another thing I would want to add is a small comment on your writing style, sometimes you write more like you're summing things up, it just goes from one point to another quite abruptly, try to make it a bit more like you're telling someone in hope to entertain them. Make it flow a bit more naturally ;). Finally, please continue writing, don't let yourself be held back by negative comments and try to learn from them. I'm curious to see the next part, what you've learned from the comments and of course how this story continues now that Damian is a proper 18 yo ;). Lots of love to y'all :)

Martin Please take this story off the site. Too many issues that go far beyond the fantasy.

loved it

According to this the top lusted after his bottom when he was underage. Not a fan.

cigar?

why just one boy when he can get two

I'm sorry, but to me this was straight up rape. Didn't finish it.