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May 2, 2019
rubberchap@gmail.com
5/2/19, 7:04 PM
I know you said it's your first story, but it is very confusing. Your title, "Cum Cookies for Everyone" changes to "The Second Dose" There are no cookies and only a slight mention of a previous encounter where a second session occurs. The main character ages from 10 to 18 years old with no real intensity to the story telling. This is where I stopped reading - "*He wanted to compare the feeling to the expert blow-jobs from his girlfriend. Or the really soft lips and the enthusiasm of his twenty year old student boy toy from this semester*." You never mentioned the Marvin's obsession with Damian had other mitigating attractions to another unmentioned 3rd party character that you failed to give a background story. This one that HAD the "Second Dose" - and I believe - has a more important storyline than the twins, or the biological father.
Anonymous
5/2/19, 4:09 PM
What do you mean it worked? It's perfectly normal to cum on your friends and to get your friends to cum on you, and to give friends presents, or to become friends with people who give you presents. Everything is the way it has always been. :P
Anonymous
5/2/19, 3:59 PM
keep going!!!! Keep going!!!!!
Anonymous
5/2/19, 3:32 PM
I meant to see Darius as a power bottom
Anonymous
5/2/19, 3:27 PM
mmmm hot leather muscle bear
Evan
5/2/19, 10:59 AM
This is masterfully executed. I loved it. Great pacing, unique approach, hot as hell. The marker on his arm and it being the catalyst to understanding his new programming was a surprisingly arousing component.
Evan
5/2/19, 9:43 AM
Love the obliviousness and control aspect. Nice job!
Anonymous
5/2/19, 7:52 AM
This was a really fun series to follow. I'm looking forward to what you come up with next.
Anonymous
5/2/19, 5:47 AM
this was surprisingly evil twist and it worked !!
Anonymous
5/2/19, 4:44 AM
Hypnothrill: "But then my second thought was that it would be fun to write a story where the protagonist THOUGHT he won in the end, but that was only because he was totally oblivious to the ways his mind was being controlled by the parasites." That is what is SOOOOO hot about your Crazy Week series, the idea that the protagonist constantly thinks he is unaffected throughout the entire process. I read the original story on which you based yours, but you added so many subtle details that made it so much hotter. I feel like every time I read it, I notice something else, which only gets me even harder. I can't wait for this one to continue!