sick idea. should be removed

REALLY HOT AND WELL WRITTEN I CAN'T WAIT FOR MORE

this is so well written better than endgame

Okay so, let's explain the missteps because reading the comments hypno i get the impression you weren't trying to make a racist story and can respect that. So let's see where you could have made it feel less... problematic. So the biggest one: the main character is a white supremacist. Yes i know he was black at the start, he's supposed to be evil, etc, etc. At the end of the day the voice of the narrator is that of a racist and also ends with him saying that whites should be dominant to blacks. Elan Mask's story (at least in it's current iteration as the comments suggest it may have been changed) it about a black man giving into a white dom using raceplay. And it has the black character reacting to this domination as if it's wrong but feels so right, which at least acknowledges that it is wrong and that his pleasure from it comes from the fact that it's wrong (i mean humiliation IS a fetish and this is still a sex site) Elan's story also never uses the words Aryan or negro (again at least as of right now it may have been changed idk) which maybe more accurate to character, aren't really great when it's some jackoff material. You need more time to establish that Andy is a horrible asshole before language like that doesn't just feel off putting and racist. And yeah it's apparent that Andy is a shithead sort of by that we all just KNOW racists are bad people, this is a sex story where he doms some black men. The story needs to go out of it's way to establish that Andy is a shitty person or it doesn't work with the story. Or at least not in a way that makes it sexy. Really just in general raceplay is something you want to avoid unless there's like a specific reason to or you have the time and energy to handle it with a bit more care. Basically it's just a little to amped up and had it been toned down in the racial aspects (and just for the hell of it the sub and dom elements played up a bit more cause let's face it that's the hot part) it would have been a less awkward story. But i do like some of your other stuff and want to see more of it. And now i'm gonna think about the fact i just wrote like a small essay on a porn site about how to approach race.

Thank you for writing this, Elan - art provokes reactions, not indifference. To those who feel a work's 'problematic' nature is necessarily divorced from authorship and context, I urge you to read & research "A Modest Proposal" and other Juvenalian works.

This is well-written and I don't see how anyone could miss the rather heavy-handed mind control / reality change involved. The neighbor's self-satisfied egalitarianism doing fuck all to address an immediate situation was a nice touch, but - in context - maybe a bit unwarranted. Raceplay usually leaves me cold, satire or not, but I appreciate the intent and I don't see how a careful reader could mistake the narration as racist. If anything, this makes me want to write something controversial in the hope that it would result in a Hypnothrill response story.

Speaking of intent, maybe it would help if I said a bit more about my intent when writing this story. In part, I wanted to address issues of technological and algorithmic racism, which are a troubling trend today. In short, we're increasingly entrusting a lot of decision making to technological devices and programs that have their creators' racial biases and blindspots embedded within them. The ColorCorrect app is my take on an old MC fiction standard, the reality-changing computer program, except it is infected with this sort of insidious systemic racism. It can only think in binary terms, and so it can only sort people into black and white (and it reshapes the people's minds and memories to better fit those categories). And it's based on some real issues with technology, like those automatic sensors that failed to detect people with dark skin, or cameras where the automatic lighting and contrast features are optimized for light-skinned people (and make dark-skinned people look shadowy and indistinct, like Bryan does after Andy alters his photo with the app). And of course, I could go into a lot more detail about the ways in which photographs of black men have been altered in order to dehumanize and stereotype the photographic subject (see Time Magazine's infamous 1994 OJ Simpson cover, for instance). It's also important to note that what's being altered are Andre and Bryan's selfies, which in turn affect their self-image. And frankly, I did want the reader to be uncomfortable when reading the sections where Bryan's self-esteem begins to crumble; here, he's beginning to internalize the stereotypical, deindividualized image of a black man that the app shows him, and I wanted to depict the psychological effects of stereotype threat. One other thing I wanted to mention was how I treated Andre's racial identity. I tried to make clear at the start of the story that he's racially mixed, but primarily identifies as a black man, because that's how white America tends to view him. Here, I tried to avoid the excessive description of facial features (noses, lips) I tend to see in race change stories, which always remind me of 19th century eugenics texts and racist pseudoscience. So instead, I emphasized how the app only made slight changes to Andre's physical appearance, lightening his skin tone a few shades, and yet this minor change causes him to be perceived (and to perceive himself) as "white." I had noticed how red hair served as a signifier of whiteness in Elan Musk's story, and I wanted my white supremacist antagonist to resemble the one in his story, so I made sure to emphasize his red hair (and freckles), but note that Andre has these even when he's a "black" man.

wow I didn't know the average reader here was a pussy lmao

No, this is the only account of me on this site :-) I don't write anywhere else.

The problem with satire is it has the widest range of responses, but the narrowest margin of error. as someone who is on the fence about it, I'm not sure what i would change in the story. but i do think it would be a good idea to tag it "racist" and "horror" to better get your intent across.