Recent Comments

Anonymous
4/15/19, 7:35 AM
waiting for a shy twink to become the alpha bottom personal trainer
Anonymous
4/15/19, 7:32 AM
Good Job! Liking this series, good transition!
Apr 12, 2019
Evan
4/15/19, 7:25 AM
Great story. Thanks for writing it. The cunning of the narrator making 'me' change myself to deal with the pain and intrusion is genius. And all the hotter making the victim complicit.
Anonymous
4/15/19, 7:21 AM
Great, Can't wait for more
Evan
4/15/19, 3:56 AM
Great premise with the showers and control. I was surprised by the catered reprogramming depending on the coaches' game like how wrestlers become hole lickers. Definitely a pleasant surprise and pushed my buttons. Can't wait to see this take effect on the teams.
Evan
4/15/19, 3:53 AM
Thoroughly enjoyed this. Thank you. LOVED the unintentional victim and how adaptive our main character was. Definitely turned the situation to his advantage. Great hypnosis usage and rewriting the subjects. So very hot. Great writing.
Anonymous
4/15/19, 12:44 AM
Insanely hot. After this I read and edged to everything you put on this site, and it was hard to keep myself from cumming the whole time.
4/15/19, 12:30 AM
Thanks for the feedback so far! I have written Part 3, it'll be up when the admin approves it (I think he's in CET, so soon after midnight in the US is when this part got approved). I'm glad y'all like the premise. I want to respond to some of the specifics: Hypnothrill & Stroppy Author: Don't worry, it'll be much slower and more gradual, but likely stick with third person. The first transformation was intended to be very quick because that's the style I wanted for the first one. As noted, I debated putting Part 3, with much more gradual changes, up with this first bit, but I wanted to see how you guys like the premise so didn't want to wait to write it. JR_Sagger: I'll put it in the queue. Stroppy Author: I hadn't thought of it from an American Gods standpoint (I actually just started to watch that show last week). I might try to work that in a bit, but it's not my focus. Mr. Knight: Yeah, the setup was rushed because I didn't want to focus on it. I wanted to set the stage so we can get to the fun stuff. And you are correct: The current idea is to have one person/change per chapter, or one type of change per chapter (e.g., why have 1 poolboy when you can have 3? and the interaction between them as they change could be interesting).
Anonymous
4/15/19, 12:23 AM
Please continue. I cannot wait to see how Andrew and David are treated at school.
4/14/19, 11:54 PM
Niiice punchline.....it seems that the poor guy s truly heading somewhere; I'm intrigued by the new character texting Our Hero. I sense a twist-a-comin'!