Recent Comments

Apr 12, 2019
Anonymous
4/12/19, 10:38 PM
I hate the second person narration. It's so amateurish. Like trying to force thoughts into my head. Better leave that to me.
4/12/19, 10:16 PM
One of the best authors in this genre. Thanks for another hot tale!
Apr 12, 2019
4/12/19, 10:10 PM
I find Second Person narratives fascinating; well done!
Anonymous
4/12/19, 9:42 PM
cannot wait for the next chapter!!!!
Anonymous
4/12/19, 8:05 PM
Fuuuuuuuuuuck this story is hot. Can't wait for the next chapter.
Oct 5, 2006
Kevin
4/12/19, 6:32 PM
i like the story
Apr 11, 2019
Anonymous
4/12/19, 5:53 PM
a great debut, thank you
Anonymous
4/12/19, 4:39 PM
I loved this. It's a really hot idea.
TimNJ
4/12/19, 8:27 AM
Great first chapter has me hooked - I really like this and want to read more about the "community".
Apr 11, 2019
Anonymous
4/12/19, 7:37 AM
I'd consider putting more work into developing and spacing your story out. It all happened almost instantaneously with no buildup or value. You can improve and make this writing incredible; if you're willing to try again and flesh this out a bit more. Doesn't have to be a multi-chapter story, but a few more paragraphs wouldn't hurt. Along with this I have to admit I didn't find the transformation ideas attractive. Perhaps consider added some more tags or notes in the summary next time.