Recent Comments

TimNJ
4/12/19, 8:27 AM
Great first chapter has me hooked - I really like this and want to read more about the "community".
Apr 11, 2019
Anonymous
4/12/19, 7:37 AM
I'd consider putting more work into developing and spacing your story out. It all happened almost instantaneously with no buildup or value. You can improve and make this writing incredible; if you're willing to try again and flesh this out a bit more. Doesn't have to be a multi-chapter story, but a few more paragraphs wouldn't hurt. Along with this I have to admit I didn't find the transformation ideas attractive. Perhaps consider added some more tags or notes in the summary next time.
Anonymous
4/12/19, 7:11 AM
awesome story!
4/12/19, 5:56 AM
I'd like to see where thisis going.
Anonymous
4/12/19, 5:28 AM
the way the character's manner of speaking/thinking changed with the body was really a highlight-- and you could really push that difference even more as well, really play up the hyper-girly bubbly twink voice and the raunchy chub pig voice (to, prospectively, other types like a stereotypically dumb jockbro himbo, or some insatiably rough powerbottom bear, or even something like "forced dominant" with him becoming a bigger older daddy bear gentleman type. just into whatever whoever has the app wants from him).
Apr 11, 2019
Anonymous
4/12/19, 5:06 AM
It was awful. I could be harsher, but you wanted a nice polite critique. Where was the build up? Where was the plot development? There was none. Awful. Having said that --- don't stop. Writing is a creative process. Be creative and let your thoughts flow -- and then edit, re-write and edit some more.
4/12/19, 1:08 AM
I always come back to this one. This may be my favorite story on the site. Just so unbelievably
Apr 11, 2019
Anonymous
4/12/19, 12:34 AM
was alright to he honest. only down side for me comes down to preference. i don't exactly like 12 ft tall giants bahaha.
Anonymous
4/11/19, 11:12 PM
Ive been following this story for a while. I hope we get to see other heroes get enslaved all the way. Maybe Cody helps brainwashing more heroes or there's a celebratory orgy with the rest of the heroes Imperious enslaved. Actually, is that what Psyphon is up to? Is he draining the powers of the other hypnotized heroes?
Anonymous
4/11/19, 9:47 PM
Fucking incredible story. keep it up!