Recent Comments

Cadek
4/9/19, 7:37 PM
Great story. love the buildup and the themes. would have liked more detail for each step but overall great story
Nov 22, 2012
DRONE X5123
4/9/19, 7:27 PM
THIS STORY IS AMAZING, IT WOULD LOVE TO BE TAKEN AND PROGRAMED IN THE WHITE ROOM!
Kevin
4/9/19, 6:43 PM
good story lucky step dad
4/9/19, 6:20 PM
I need to thank Jayce for helping me edit the last couple chapters. I was struggling to get it done. I had the mental image of the interior of the Dyson Sphere, but this was a bit of a challenge to write. So again ... THANK YOU!
Anonymous
4/9/19, 5:58 PM
a slave!!
Anonymous
4/9/19, 5:56 PM
Great story. I loved the part where the Tempest persona also submits to his master. Two comments: the change from stranger to Psyphon is abit confusing and there is a typo of the word small in " smal circular room with a single chair."
Tkhon
4/9/19, 4:12 PM
Yeah actually the word doc I wrote has lines to denote time shifts but they didn't carry over when I pasted it in, and I didn't think to add them back. I'll do that when I have a chance
4/9/19, 4:11 PM
I think the story itself is super hot, but there are some formatting problems. You need some sort of line or "* * " to indicate when you're making a time-jump, otherwise it's just too confusing.
Anonymous
4/9/19, 3:37 PM
i found nothing wrong with this story, one of the best things about tkhon is that he gives us really good short stories and doesnt leave us hanging chapter by chapter. whenever i see a story he wrote i already know its gonna be good and it was. A+
Reggie
4/9/19, 3:22 PM
Great story and well-written! I love the foot fetish aspect you inject into your stories.