Recent Comments

Anonymous
4/9/19, 7:53 PM
Fucking love the superchub idea and the fatpad buried dick! Would be amazing if that happens to all the characters 😍
Anonymous
4/9/19, 7:51 PM
will this continue?
Cadek
4/9/19, 7:37 PM
Great story. love the buildup and the themes. would have liked more detail for each step but overall great story
Nov 22, 2012
DRONE X5123
4/9/19, 7:27 PM
THIS STORY IS AMAZING, IT WOULD LOVE TO BE TAKEN AND PROGRAMED IN THE WHITE ROOM!
Kevin
4/9/19, 6:43 PM
good story lucky step dad
4/9/19, 6:20 PM
I need to thank Jayce for helping me edit the last couple chapters. I was struggling to get it done. I had the mental image of the interior of the Dyson Sphere, but this was a bit of a challenge to write. So again ... THANK YOU!
Anonymous
4/9/19, 5:58 PM
a slave!!
Anonymous
4/9/19, 5:56 PM
Great story. I loved the part where the Tempest persona also submits to his master. Two comments: the change from stranger to Psyphon is abit confusing and there is a typo of the word small in " smal circular room with a single chair."
Tkhon
4/9/19, 4:12 PM
Yeah actually the word doc I wrote has lines to denote time shifts but they didn't carry over when I pasted it in, and I didn't think to add them back. I'll do that when I have a chance
4/9/19, 4:11 PM
I think the story itself is super hot, but there are some formatting problems. You need some sort of line or "* * " to indicate when you're making a time-jump, otherwise it's just too confusing.